many things that i say are lies but what i am about to tell you is fact
you can trust me on that
first of all, I'm not a good person. i may act like a good person
but I'm not
you have no idea of the things that i have done
or could do to you
i was never meant to fall in love
with you
it was such a dangerous thing
another thing about me
you should never trust me
i have worked too hard
too long
in order for people to not trust me
but like i said there are a few things that
you can trust
one
is that i will be sitting on the bench on the courtyard
every, and i repeat, every morning
and two
is that no matter how cold it may or may not be
i will complain, but i am lying
i love the cold
and three
i will always love you
no matter how much i shouldn't
some things can never change
and some things should never be trusted
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a very well written poem. I didn't really see grammar errors, except for some simple ones, at least I think I did? Don't remember. Lol, anyways. I love the title, made me think for a bit. On to the story, although I got confused a bit and had to re-read some lines, it was pretty good overall. Reminds me of "the boy who cried wolf" ya know? Like ok you're lying, lying, and lying. And now how am I supposed to know if you're telling the truth? Anyways, overall; GOOD JOB!
Keep up the good writing,
-Brian.beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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this was interesting... I mean if a person lies how can you trust that this time they're telling the truth you know? it's kind of hard to trust someone when all you've heard are lies. good job though!
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beautiful. A little confusing for me personally, but still beautiful. I'm gonna definately go and see if you have anything else posted yet. Keep up the great writing okay! *gives cookie*
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