Love Should Be A Crime

I see the knife in your hand. I see the tears in your eyes, and I'm pretty sure you see the fear in mine. And the regret. I regret all the things I said, all the things I did, and all the thoughts that I know you could read on my face. Finally, it was enough to push you to this point.1

We're standing up now, both of us drenched in the rain. My leg is bleeding where you stabbed me with that knife before, and I don't have much more to say.2

So I wrap myself around her. My arms, my legs, and I cling to her.3

"Please don't kill me...I love you."4

And, attempting to keep my life, I kiss her. Her cheek, her forehead, her nose, and her lips. When she drops the knife, I push her away and pick it up. 5

She was interesting to toy with, so I spare her life, grab her car, and leave her there.6

Love should be a crime it's so fun.

Author notes

This may very possibly be the worst thing I've ever written. It doesn't even make sense. The title/last line thing doesn't work at all. Oh well! Hope you liked it anyway.

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  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    February 26, 2008

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    Oh my gosh this is really good! You should continue on with this it could make for an awesome story.
    ~Joann


  • crosscountry07 gold member
    February 24, 2008
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    Wow....this was actually pretty good! I agree, I think you should lengthen this story! -Liz


  • Taylor Renee
    February 9, 2008

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    Hey! I read this when you first entered, but I was too lazy to comment

    And it absolutely does no suck! I actually thought it was quite good, and it was a nice twist for the title. I loved it.

    It was written pretty nicely, too!

    Don't worry, you did a very nice job

    Thanks a ton for entering my contest, great work, and I wish you the best of luck!

    xoxo
    -♥-
    Tay


  • Breathless Ballons
    February 6, 2008

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    wow.. this is a great story... except i think you could make it longer and explain what is happening a bit more...=]


  • YourPinUpDoll
    February 3, 2008
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    Actually

    I quite like the last phrase at the end... I think you could continue this if you really wanted to... i don't know about your other works but this one seems to fit Taylor's ticket just fine in my opinion...I hope you write more to this!!!!!

    Evy

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