Confused

Confused:1

A tear drop runs down my face
And another
Then a whole lot more come
I cannot stop.
I think
Am I a wimp
I must be
But I'm not.
No matter
What they say
I'm brave
I am doing my best.
It is too much
But it is too little
It is too huge
And I'm to small.
I wipe the tears away
And go on
I am NOT too SMALL
It only feels that way.2

(Catherine Trotter) 3

©2008 4

Author notes

This is how I have been feeling, so please be a liitle nicer than you usually would be (but don't lie haha)

A contest entry

Okay...so, it's a poem (not a story), but what do you think? Is it as good as a famous poem, or do I need to put in some more effort?

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  • RedHearts
    June 19, 2008
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    I love this poem...Good job...


  • NightTime-Fox
    June 6, 2008

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    I will be DQing you but i would like to comment on this... I rrrrreallly liked this, it is a very emotional poem. But i think you might be able to add more into it... Thanks for entering but I have to DQ because you didn't follow my rules... Sorry


  • Xtclozer-
    March 7, 2008
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    I loved it. It was deep, and it held a lot of meaning.
    Unfortunenately.. *sigh* It is under the word minimum. I really did love it, but I am afraid I have to Remove you I am sorry.
    Thanks for entering any way,
    This was indeed a great piece


  • not done baking
    February 26, 2008

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    I really like the contradictions: "too much" "too little" "too huge" "too small". Those were very nice. I think it does work as a "famous poem." It's short and to the point and everyone can understand it.

    I thought that the third line was a little awkward and graceless. (???) I just think that it could have been smoother, like the tears falling down the face. "a whole lot more" just seems informal to me.

    beginning: 3, ending: 5.


  • Inanu
    February 20, 2008
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    Wow....that's all I can say. This was a very good poem.

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