Confused:1
A tear drop runs down my face
And another
Then a whole lot more come
I cannot stop.
I think
Am I a wimp
I must be
But I'm not.
No matter
What they say
I'm brave
I am doing my best.
It is too much
But it is too little
It is too huge
And I'm to small.
I wipe the tears away
And go on
I am NOT too SMALL
It only feels that way.2
(Catherine Trotter) 3
©2008 4
Author notes
This is how I have been feeling, so please be a liitle nicer than you usually would be (but don't lie haha)
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Okay...so, it's a poem (not a story), but what do you think? Is it as good as a famous poem, or do I need to put in some more effort?
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I love this poem...Good job...
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I will be DQing you but i would like to comment on this... I rrrrreallly liked this, it is a very emotional poem. But i think you might be able to add more into it... Thanks for entering but I have to DQ because you didn't follow my rules... Sorry
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oops...
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I loved it. It was deep, and it held a lot of meaning.
Unfortunenately.. *sigh* It is under the word minimum. I really did love it, but I am afraid I have to Remove you
I am sorry.
Thanks for entering any way,
This was indeed a great piece
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I really like the contradictions: "too much" "too little" "too huge" "too small". Those were very nice. I think it does work as a "famous poem." It's short and to the point and everyone can understand it.
I thought that the third line was a little awkward and graceless. (???) I just think that it could have been smoother, like the tears falling down the face. "a whole lot more" just seems informal to me.
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Wow....that's all I can say. This was a very good poem.
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