Walking in the rain is great when you cry. Because no one will notice and you feel almost like you fit into this world. So like every day here in the Valley of Rogue, i walk down the street after school crying and spilling my guts out into a little diary until i fall asleep to my own heart beat. This living stuff is not so easy.1
Mom says that soon, I'll be beautiful and i won't run the streets crying. I'll be just perfect. But she doesn't know her little sweet Drake would rather die. I like the crying because if i don't, i can't sleep.2
I stare at the little slit on my hand. The one that is barely noticable and connects me to all of my friends. As i space off, i wonder why isn't it bigger and moreover just plain ugly. 3
My sleep is just like being awake but even worse because i am scared of the Beautiful surgery and dream about it all the time. It's like taking all of your impurities and making them the most pure. No flaws, not even a bruise will get away. I have a plan though. On my 16th birthday, i plan to go "willingly" to the beautiful room where you know they scream, it's just unheard. I will take one of those vials of "Happy Juice" and drink the whole thing so think i am crazy and they will banish me from becoming beautiful. just like i wanted in the first place. Until then i guess i will have to LIVE. What a scary thought and why? because i am 16 tomarrow and don't care if i died tonoght as long as i am not a "PERFECT BEAUTIFUL"
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I love the first line. Some mechanics issues here and there, but nothing major. Had me hooked at line one. Phrasing of the words were a little bit confusing towards the end, nothing that'd be too hard to fix though. You should definitely continue on, it's great so far.
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this could be in a novel or movie, it is perfect for teenager to read, because usually they feel like this at one time or another. but to the author if this is you just keep on living you have a lot to live for, really you haven't begun to live so don't give up now FIGHT.
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Vials of "Happy Juice"? Damn, I have that. I call it vodka, though. The last paragraph reminded me a lot of a series of books with titles like the uglies, the pretties, and the specials. I've never read them, but they're always on display at the B&N by the movie theater. By the movie theater... like I'm giving you directions or something.
I've gone brain dead. It was very well written, and I especially liked the beginning.
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Exactly
I got my inspiration from the Uglies series i want to own it but i dont have the moooolah... hehe there is a movie theater downtown where i come from... but yes that is where it all started...
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Its very interesting and its such a sad and beatiful story. It was wonderfully writen and I can't wait to see how it turns out.
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Wow! Well I certainly found it intriguing. I seen a couple mispells, but that of course is easily fixed. And in my opinion doesn't detract from the story. The title was what caught my attention on this one and I would love to read more. It sounds like this girl is extremely depressed and I would love to see how things turn out for her.
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Thanks You!
I would have to be insane if i didn't thank you for commenting. i actually got the title from a quote saying "its wonderful to cry in the rain, so no one knows you are crying" -
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That's a beautiful quote and so true! I can definitely relate to that one. I hope your going to write more of this! I love to read and this really caught my attention.
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