The Robotic Heroes and The 9/11 Attacks (Rewrite)

It was a beautiful September 11, 2025. We were out flying around having races to see who can fly the fastest, when all of a sudden a time port-hole appeared right in front of us and was pulling us toward it! We quickly turned around and tried flying the other way but we were still heading for the port-hole. So we turned around and flew into the port-hole to save on gas.1

When we got into the port-hole there was a lot of different kinds of colors that were racing the other way. Then a clock appeared and was spinning counter-clock wise really fast years were passing buy us and the months were to. It finally stopped and the hole opened up again and we were thrown out and continued flying.2

“I wonder what year it is.” I said 3

“Hey there is where our home is!” CJ said 4

So we landed and stopped in to see what Bob was working on then.5

“Hey he’s building you!” I said to CJ6

“Hey Bob!” CJ shouted 7

“W-Who are you?” Bob said frightened “what do you want from me?”8

“Bob you made us.” I said “infact you’re making CJ right now.”9

“I’m creating you two?” Bob asked 10

“Yeah you’re building CJ now, then you will build JR then Rascal, there is two others black night and silver hawk but they’re not here.”11

“Didn’t they go and help another country?” Rascal said 12

“Why yes they did that’s right I almost forgot.” I said 13

“So what are you guys doing here?” Bob asked 14

“I don’t know,” I said, “Wait what day is it and what is the year?”15

“It is Sept 9th 2001, why what is the problem, what is going to happen?”16

“Sept 9th hey,” I said sadly, “I probably shouldn’t tell you this but in two days the World Trade Centers are going to be attacked and so is the Pentagon. It is the biggest terrorist attack ever.”17

“Oh and so that is why you are here.” Bob said18

“Yeah and you can’t tell anyone about us being from the future or people will be asking us questions about the future, and another thing don’t stop working on CJ. “I said 19

“I’ll be right back.” I said 20

“Where are you going?” CJ asked 21

“I want to get one last look at the world trade centers before they go down and the pentagon before that gets hit.” I said 22

“Wait for me I’ll come.” Rascal said 23

“Oh what the heck come on.” I said we flew off to the world trade centers first.24

“Wow! There tall!” CJ said 25

“Yeah and think there going down in a four days “I said 26

“Man that’s sad I wish we could do something !” CJ said 27

“I know, I know how you feel but we can’t.” I said 28

“ darn it!” CJ yelled really loud.29

It echoed all throughout New York .30

“Lets get out of here” I said31

We flew off really fast to the pentagon and seen where the plane will hit there. Then we went back home and we were preparing to get ready when the telephone rang.32

Hello?” bob asked “who is this?”33

There was a long silence.34

“Oh I see I’m working on something,” Bob said (another silence) “No it’s not and alien craft I found, I’m Building them.”35

Another silence 36

“No there are three of them, OK bye.” He hung up the phone.37

“Oh man!” Bob started laughing, “that was the neighbor!”38

“What did she want?” I asked 39

Bob laughing like crazy “She Ha-Ha She thought you were aliens!” Bob fell down laughing like a lunatic.40

“Well she will get use to it.” I said as I started forming ideas on how to stop the plains.41

“well do you know what you’re here for?” Bob asked 42

“Remember we told you earlier.” I said 43

“oh yeah I forgot.” Bob said 44

The first day was to rest, fuel up and plan what to do to stop the planes. 45

“Well we could fly over and stop them from leaving the airports.” Rascal said 46

“No then we have the problem of what to tell the pilots and passengers.” CJ said 47

“Or call it in not to let the suspects on the plains.” I said 48

“But what about the charges, you know they’ll ask for charges.” CJ said 49

“OK Umm, OK we found evidence of them taking down the world trade centers.” I said 50

Bob explained to his workers how we work, move, and how to charge us up.51

“That will work,” said Rascal “but how do we tell all three airports?” 52

“OK rascal you tell Washington’s airport, CJ you tell one of New York’s air port and I’ll tell the other airport.” I said 53

“All right then lets go through a practice run, just fly over to your designated areas but don’t tell them not to let the plains leave.” CJ said 54

“Got it CJ.” I said 55

“OK.” Rascal said 56

“Then lets go!” I said 57

Then we flew off to where we needed to go, rascal went to Washington’s airport that the plain takes off from, CJ went to flight 90’s, and I went to the other airport. 58

“Help! Help! He stole my purse!” I heard a lady yell.59

I flew off and got sight of the man who she was pointing to and easily caught up to him using my jets of course. I fired a been bag at the guy and knocked him out, then the police showed up shortly afterward. I was taking off away from there and one of the cops called in a flying object is that was unidentified.60

“Gee I wonder where the flying object is that he couldn’t identify?” I said, “ hum could it be me? No way, Of Course it is!”61

I couldn’t help it I just started laughing, I even had to land so I wouldn’t crash. 62

“JR – JR are you there?” CJ called, “come in JR , are you there?” 63

[laughing] “Yes I’m here.” I could dearly get the words out.64

Finally I calmed down enough to go home and tell the others that I was called a UFO.65

“What!?!” CJ said excitedly.66

“Yeah I was called a UFO.” I said. A few minutes later when we all calmed down Bob explained that they never seen us before. 67

After that we turned in for the night. 68

When I woke up it was 12:00 AM Sept. 11! 69

“Wake up!” I yelled and put a siren on.70

“What time is it?” Bob said.71

“It’s 12:00am…..”I said.72

“Then I’m going back to bed.” Bob said tiredly.73

“Sept. 11th.” I said.74

Bob stopped in his tracks. There was a long silence nothing was heard not even.. or wait there was a cricket chirping.75

“go to your assigned areas and wait for the plains to take off and not let them leave.” bob said.76

We went to the airports and told them to let us know before the plains leave.77

“Umm- you know when the plain leaves?” an airport worker asked.78

“Yes before it leaves.” I said.79

“Well there it goes.” He pointed to a plain that just took off.80

“What!” I yelled and I headed for the runway.81

I soared down the runway and caught up with the plain.82

“Land now!” I said on my CB 83

“Sorry this is a direct flight.” The pilot said.84

“I don’t care land now there is a terrorist members on board.” I said.85

“Oh sure what proof do you have?” the pilot asked. 86

“What! Hey! Stop!” then it went blank87

“Bye! Ha Ha” the terrorist said and headed for the world trade center.88

I followed him and as I flew I tapped into the planes computer and was flying it as I flew right beside it.89

Then I landed it where the police searched the plane and found that the terrorists killed each other.90

“CJ, hack into the planes computer and fly it your self and land it at a air port.” I said 91

“OK.” and he landed the plane at the same airport.92

“go help Rascal and I am going to catch flight 90.” I said to CJ 93

So he left to help Rascal and I went to catch flight 90. When I got there the pilots were removed from the cockpit and they were over Pennsylvania and the passengers were trying to take over the plane and when the terrorists were crashing the plane I just took over the plane and the passengers were trying to stop me from flying it when I told them that I was trying to save them they let me land it and they all thanked us for saving there lives.94

“It is all in a days work.” I said and took off 95

We were flying home and the time port hole opened up again and we were in our own time we went home and then. 96

“watch where you are flying.” a another robot said97

“why don’t you watch where you are flying.” I said 98

“hey you are JR aren’t you?” he said \99

“yes who is asking?” I asked 100

I am big joe and I have some one who has been looking for you.” he said and a door opened out popped bob!! 101

“Where were you guys? There has been a world wide search for you everyone thought you wrecked.” bob said 102

“we were back in time to help with the 9-11 terrorist attacks.” CJ said 103

So we all went home and the hole worlds news crews went to our house to get the big story that we are home and safe.104

“bob where were the robots?” one news person asked 105

“they were back in time helping with the 9-11 attacks.” bob said 106

“what did they do there” asked another 107

“they stopped the plains from hitting the world trade centers, the pentagon, and the one that crashed in Pennsylvania.” bob told them 108

“did they succeed?”109

“well….” bob said and then over the news of us came the world trade center towers were standing tall and the hole at Pennsylvania was filled the national park that was put there to rember those who died was gone.110

“They did succeed!111

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  • IrishDreamer
    February 3, 2008

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    Need's a lot of work.

    You need to add supporting detail into your story, as well as more information on your characters. The story base is good but running up to somebody and saying "Hey the world trade center..." Is like saying "Hey your brother's dead, I'm sorry, but don't worry my parties tomorrow and your invited hope you show up! Oh and don't forget my present!" Do you see what I'm saying? Also why would they risk there lives by going to an unknow portal for "saving gas" it seem's a little... odd. Also you may want to compare 2001 to 2025. Is there more famine? Did the ice caps melt? Or did it get 100% better? If you have any queastion's or comment's on my comment please feel free to comment me back.

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