When the epic kiss of death left me fallen in the cold harsh wind winter time and the teardrops fall upon the snow. I willow in silence of the things that I will never know.
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- One sentence, one paragraph by Writing0Freedom.
160 points, ended February 14, 2008, 22 entries
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I like the first part but at cold it gets lost. The wording is very complicated. You can enter as many times as you want so if you wanted to enter many times and use all these words you still could. Sometimes simple is better. I liked " I willow in the silence of things"
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I didn't really make sense of this, Blair. Maybe it's because of the wording.
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I suk at little wording ..ok urm somone dies and you love them or a peice of that person dies and your lost inside that peice that is flaoting through that winters cold harsh wind until you realise there is no hope in remaining lost and consumed in the tears and living in the pain because the pain is what got u there in the first place...
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