20,000 losses just for you

Twenty thousand times I tried to win1

I tried for you2

And felt twenty thousand failures all over again3

I tried to change myself for you4

But I was still hated5

No matter what I tried to do6

If I could win just one time7

I’d do it for you8

And once would be fine9

Author notes

this is what happens when my algebra teacher decides to be a....well you get the idea

all comments are welcome, as are all elephants! But llamas are NOT ALLOWED!! And I mean that....so no llamas!

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  • briannnnn
    February 17, 2008
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    This is good. Great job! :]

    Keep up the good work,
    -Brian.

  • LucidLakes
    January 31, 2008
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    Pretty nice

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Prodigious.Mirth
    January 31, 2008
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    haha i get chu foo