The First Time We Met1
December 14, 19962
As the school bell rang it felt like butterflies were having their way with my stomach. I was so excited about this guy whom wanted to meet me for the first time. We had set up this arrangement a few days ago, that we would meet outside the school. 3
I didn't know what he looked like, but we had been talking for a few weeks just on the phone and got along great. His voice was so dreamy and every word that came out of his mouth was as sweet as sugar. I would quiver all over every time I thought about him, yet I didn't even know what he looked like.4
As I walked down the school steps towards the doors I kept looking and wondering who he was and how handsome he must be. I couldn't wait. As I said goodbye to my friends, our eyes looked right into each others and I knew, that was my dream man. He was about my height, muscular fit, baby blue eyes that stole my heart, and most handsome face I'd ever seen on a male. This was not a seventeen year old boy, this was a handsome, beautiful seventeen year old man, and he was mine.5
As we met and said our hellos, we walked out because I had to catch the bus. He was the most amazing guy. He knew how to make me laugh, he was kind hearted, and sensuous. I kept wondering why he wanted a girl like me. 6
It was almost time for my bus. As I seen it coming down the lane, I told him I had to go. I started to walk off, and got spun around, and into his lips I went. He kissed me like no other man had ever kissed me before. When our lips connected It was like nothing or no one was around, it was just me and him, alone, together, forever. 7
His lips was as soft as cotton, but hot as fire at the same time. His arms around me felt like a warm, safe blanket I never wanted to remove, I wanted to wear it forever. His tongue knew every single perfect move in my mouth. I almost sank to my knees. The aroma of his skin was like sweet musk, I knew at that moment I would go further and beyond with this man. I wanted him, I needed him right then, right there. That kiss seemed to last forever. 8
We unlocked lips and he said "I love you". I didn't know if he meant it, but in return I said "I love you too", as we always said when we ended our long phone calls. I knew it was true in my heart. I loved this man.
Author notes
This is the first time I ever met the love of my life. I may make a series of stories about our dateing life. If you read this and like this and want more, let me know and I will start on story #2 "The First Time".
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I don't think this is descriptive enough, and you definitely didn't start in the right place. You should have started with the phone calls. How did you get each other's numbers? Why did you continue calling each other after that first time? What was said? I think this should start with your phone calls and then work it up from there.
It's also unrealistic how perfect he is. I think he maybe shouldn't be so good-looking or something. Why else would they talk on the phone first instead of meeting in person? And the "I love you" thing is overkill.
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WRITE MORE
I loved it. It was so romantic. I wish my own love life was like your story.
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Deelightful...
I know I read this before and if I read, I would have commented, but no comment? Dunno what happened here.
I have often wondered about online relationships, of that depth, reaching a real person to person contact.
True or not, an excellent story on perhaps the best that might happen out of such a beginning, just chatting on line.
Then again, nowadays, free voice and easy video camera's and photo file exchanges, it is perhaps not as difficult as it once was.
Nice write...
Amicus...
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In paragraph seven you told us about the kiss, but in paragraph eight you showed us the reader that the kiss was more then a kiss. I wonder if you could combine or even leave out paragraph seven? Well anyways thats my two cents worth.
You are so lucky
I'm glad you found something like this.
Brooke
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it's so sweet! i want this!
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Good work! Nice story. It's great that you were both talking for so long before you even met! I'd like to read the next chapter when it's up as well!
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I love this
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Good beginning
as we had already said so many times before we got off the phone.
I was confused here....?
but otherwise good beginning
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That is so romantic. This is a cute and beautiful story but not exactly a story. You should deffinatly write more of it tho. I really enjoied reading it. Thanks for entering and good luck in teh contest.
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Wonderful love story. It was great, and I want to re read it
but I cant XD
Keep up the good work
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good love story
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so u've been dating for 11 years? orrrr did i do that wrong >.<
i thought this was perfect the way it was. short and sweet.
nice descriptions. i could feel what you were feeling.
favorite line:
His arms around me felt like a warm, safe blanket I never wanted to remove, I wanted to wear it forever.
again, goodjob xD
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This definitely captures the essence of true love. You got to know each other before you even let the physical appearance get in the way of emotions. I do feel like if he wasn't the most handsome person in the world,he still would have been to you for you both had a spark beore you even met. Loved thestory. You should write more as a testimony of the true love you know with him. No matter if one person reads it or a thousand, I feel it will give you pleasure to put your thoughts about wonderful times down in ink (this case print on a screen). Thank you for truly participating in my "First True Love" contest!
Ted E
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Good story. Very descriptive. Could have used some more dialog between the two characters.
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