[ without my love I'm in the dirt1 ]

without my love I'm in the dirt1

no strength to say it fucking hurts2

you pull out your knife and I smile with glee3

damn this knife better set me free4

27 cuts on a fucked up wrist5

but I'm not your fucking masochist6

you hold your whip in front of my eyes7

you know how to tease me to make me cry8

36 times I hear the sharp crack9

but you werent the first to scar my back10

you pull out your gun and take aim, dam nright11

You better end this game tonight12

10,000 shots in my fucked up heart13

but its already torn apart

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not to be taken literally

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  • Xtclozer-
    January 30, 2008

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    I liked this ^.^ and it really reminded me of the song 2 hot dog by Limp bizkit. If you listen to the song, you'll know what I meen.

    This sounded like it COULD be turned into a song.. the rhyming.. the flow.. everything about it.
    Cool


  • Springs gold member
    January 30, 2008

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    I was just reading this, and I read it all strangely enough to the tune and tone of 'Bleed It Out' by Linkin Park very odd. I think it fits in really well.
    ''10,000 shots in my fucked yp heart'' *fucked up heart

    Yeah. This'd make a good set of lyrics for a rock song I think