woman stomps up and down singing ten green bottles hanging on the wall1
staff nurses in psychiatric hospital St Lukes sign above office look askance2
other patients join in singing.3
two start stomping up and down themselves.4
one cries5
woman tries to go home.6
cant get out of the door7
all the staff rush up and try to get her to stayshe only listens to one nurse who calmes her down when she requests the police come and she challenges their authority to keep her locked up8
she eventually calms down and sits in a chair outside the office.9
an ambulance arrives and takes the man away (strapped to a stretcher) that calmed her down10
this really fucking happened11
shes outside sat talking to a paranoid schizophrenic he tells her his label, she tells him hers.12
he says she turns him on13
she asks how14
he says he has a hard on and gets it out15
she sucks it16
some nurses see and one comes outside and says could she please go to the womens quarters. okay she says and goes out but the nurse leaves so her and the man dash upstairs to the bedroom and have sex and he cums inside her as she wants a baby.17
this really fucking happened18
she demands they stop watching her every ten minutes. she says its not enough time to masturbate19
this really fucking happened20
Author notes
not really finished yet...need more sherry to finely hone and tune it
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fuck. I mean, I was there plink. As soon as you mentioned st. luke's hospital I was there since there is a st. luke's one mile from my place here in the states. it is also so present that the need to express this, whether it was real or not, is incredibly delectable and makes you pause and wonder because the reality is that it could happen, and anything that could happen will indeed or already has happened. I loved it so much. It suggests and transfers all the need for life in a few lines that say so much without saying much at all.
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no way!
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but did the fucking really happen?
A tale unlike any I have read, and would like to see more of this brilliance. shiny shiny humans, glistening with fluids and various lotions. -
I believe that it really fucking happened. Nice setting of the scene... it all makes sense.
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immeadiant??? ok, i may have had a couple of beers. *shrugs*
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certainly an 'o' short on too.......bugger.
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plinks, that is one of the rawest things i've ever read. sounds like it just happened and you haven't quite got your head around it yet. but you convey it to us perfectly. it's brilliant. vital. immeadiate.
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I really like it. I'm having trouble figuring out how the first part connects to the second part (aside from the fact that it happened in the same hospital, possibly to the same person). It's funny because things like this really do happen in hospitals. This piece may inspire me to write about Larry who was constantly unplugging the patient phones and stealing them. This story was very well done. It left so many doors open for the readers imagination. This is the kind of stuff I love to read.
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