I'm cutting
I'm bleeding
It wont stop1
I watch the blood
Fall to the ground
Forming a puddle2
I feel faignt
I cover the cut
My heartbeat slows3
I fall to the ground
To fly with the brids
A contest entry
- Emo's,Emo's,Emo's I want EMO'S by XxCheyennexChaosxX.
100 points, ended March 9, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Honorable mention
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Emo moment. was it a good one?
Comments
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You're sooooo good! Jeez it's pretty amazing, lol. You should write a poem book! ^^.
Those feelings are so deep and it's really hard to portray them the way you did, it gave me the chills, lol. That's a good thing!
AMAZING? YES!
GRAMMAR? (unfortunately) YES!
-good thing: it's only two small things ^^
Paragraph 1: wont to won't
Paragraph 3: faignt to feint or faint, depends which one.beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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lol.
I agree with my best friend.
But it's so cute! [As long as it's not true
)
I ♥ it.
So...EMO!
ILY!
xoxo
-♥-
Tay
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emo!!
yes dillon, it was a good one. but holy crap, you really are emo!!! lol
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