The story will be about a 19 year old girl named Cindy who is conflicted with learning to trust herself, or the church she is a part of.1
The first action in the story is Cindy being forced to take part in a gossip scene in the kitchen of the church she attends regarding many of the so called 'odd' people that attend.2
The scene moves into Cindy's in-laws house where they sit down for dinner, and more observations of Cindy's as she has to repress her true emotions, thoughts and feelings and live a lie in order to be accepted.3
We see how Cindy lives from day to day with a child. Her dissatisfaction with the church and realizing that though she is surrounded by family no one cares about her life and this drives her to finally make decisions fer herself.4
Decisive action occurs when Cindy makes a decision to go to college, and everyone around her tries to stop her from doing so.5
Then we see a new setting emerge as Cindy goes through frustrating processes of trying to get into school, and finally succeeding. 6
We see her personality begin to grow as she takes classes, and gets good grades. Her family takes a background, as they decide not to interfere or encourage her steps, and continues to undermine her. 7
When the head person of the psychology department begins to take note of her, Cindy gets scared and decides to change to a religious college, where she can fit in without anyone ever wanting to take a real interest in her except for her religious development. Her inner conflicts are repressed once again.8
Then she meets Joe, an atheist who triggers the dormant secular self, and brings it out. She appears to blossom almost over night, and thinks she has found away to bring both selves together.9
Unfortunately Joe, understands their friendship in a different way than she does, and 'gently' rapes her. 10
This throws Cindy into greater conflict, than she ever imagined, as she tries to balance and make sense of both the Christian world she is living in and her growing illicit relationship and her relationship with her husband..11
Cindy ends up trying to kill herself, to resolve the problem. 12
The story ends with her learning that she must trust herself, but she remains alone and still controlled.13
Author notes
Hi readers. This is my first ever attempt at writing a fiction story(besides the fable that I wrote and posted on here). Somehow I think I made this synopsis way too general, and abstract without enough concrete action. If you read this, I could use all the tips and criticism I can get to improve this. Thanks for reading and for any feedback you give!
What did you think? Please comment!
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Hi Richard! It's been forever since hearing from you! You've been missed! Thanks for your feedback on my synopsis. I got an A on it- so I must have did something right in it, as you say. Thanks for stopping by and reading and commenting
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How else do you flesh out an idea or concept without a synopsis? What you have is not to short or to long and as far as being general, i thought that was the point of the synopsis. Blessings and best wishes,~richard
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yes I will post This is actually supposed to be a synopsis for a short story. But I have a whole volume of books about Cindy in my head, this being only one of them, so you will see a lot in the future, and I hope you grow to like her a lot!
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ah! Thank you so much Passionvine for your extremely helpful feedback. It was what I was looking for. I couldn't for the life of me see this objectively. I will go back and rewrite this with the tips you have so kindly offered. Again, thanks.
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Great start
When it comes to plot the most important thing to know is what does your protagonist Cindy want in concrete and active verbs. Wanting to be happy, be successful, be accepted or any other being verb will only bog down the plot. Thin of the format as Cindy "active verb" direct object. That sort of scenario will drive both the action of your plot and the writing out of the sceanario. -
this has all the makings of a great story... and i can't wait to read it when you start posting actual chapters.. you DO intend to post the actual chapters, or were you just teasing us?
lol, anyway, awesome idea for a story and i can't wait to start reading about it...
~o.e.~
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I think you got off to a great start here. This kind of summary really makes the reader want to read about what's going to happen. Sounds very interesting.
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Worth doing
You have enough in your synopsis for a major novel, but it needs to have the other characters fleshed out and real for that to happen. Make each scene as real as you can, and make us care for the people in it and it will be one I will buy even in hardcover! Sounding good! Go for it.
S--Dee
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A Good Start
This kind of reminds me of what you might find on the inside cover of a book. As your title states it's a "Synopsis", it's what gets the readers to buy the book. The story behind this is what you need to concentrate on. Sounds like it will make a story worth reading. Keep up the good work. -
Great start!
Well, to be honest, this is a great outline/start to your story! It is a little too vague to be considered a story in it's own right - but this could easily be turned into a play, a movie, a novel, or a story. It certainly has a great plotline, but the details need to be developed a lot more - And in this case propbably put into 3rd person omnipotent view so you can tell all of the emotional things and thoughts the people are having ...
Whoa. That's probably more than you wanted or expected.
I liked it alot though. Has lots of potential.
If you want, I'll collab on this with you and help you out or something. Or you may want to come read the story I have posted.
Loved it and I'm sure your writing skills will continue to grow!
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As far as a general outline is concerned I think you share enough information overall to generate interest of some. It read a little more detailed just at the beginning and then got more generalized as it went. I am sure you have ideas about filling in the blank spots and you want to provide just enough of a tease to get the reader wanting the rest. I would read the finished product based on this so I guess it worked, on me anyway.
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