The darkness inside grows 1
I am unsure of why its really there 2
I have this huge lonelyness inside 3
To prove the darkness and trying to make the pain equal 4
I have scars up and down my wrist and shoulders 5
The scars grow more and more each night 6
I can`t stop the pain 7
I hate my life and myself 8
I am a dead soul 9
Now a days I wonder through the halls of that.. 10
School building that I heardly underst and anymore 11
I am like a shadow on the walls through-out the day Why won`t it go away? 12
I am runing away from it yet it keeps catching up... 13
with me 14
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O.O this is really good. it really drew me in. Keep penning and let me know when u post something new. ^_^
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yes i did sorry about that
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Very nice dark poem. Really captures the feeling. I can definitely relate, probably in a less serious way though. Some spelling things here and there. Line 11 confuses me a bit. Did you mean:
School building that I hardly understand anymore?
Great job. =]
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strong feelings.. you really know how to express yourself. a few spelling mistakes. but you can still understand it. i loved the part there you describe yourself as a shadow on the walls. really good way of expressing the feeling of being lonely. i mean you are like a shadow. no one sees you. but you are still there. all in your loneliness.
really good job
keep up the good work
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shit, man. I guess most of us can relate to this, but still. That alone is pretty sad. You really caught that apathetic part of depression. Is this a poem, or is it just how it came out? Either way, its a great dark piece. I hope you post more.
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