Why I Don't Write Romance

They walked hand in hand down the path, the sunlight streaming through the trees casting soft shadows on them both. 1

Charles gazed into Samantha's eyes as he murmured, 'You are the most beautiful person I have ever seen, my dear.'2

Samantha smirked as she said, 'you are so cheesy, Charles.'3

He grinned an ear-splitting grin, and kissed her lightly on the cheek. 'I know, but you love it.'4

She just laughed. He was right; she did love it. She laid her head on his shoulder, feeling his steady pulse as they walked slowly through the park.5

Charles took a measured breath, savouring the sweet smell of her perfume. He kissed her hair and smiled. 6

They walked in silence awhile, simply enjoying each other's presence.7

Charles bit his lip nervously; steeling himself for what he was about to do. 8

He stopped walking.9

Samantha looked up at him, curiosity only slightly diluting the love in her eyes. 10

'Samantha.' He paused as he knelt down on one knee and pulled something from his pocket. 'Samantha, will you marry me?' he asked, his voice soft but steady as he carefully opened the small box and held it up to her.11

A tear trickled down her cheek as she smiled at him through misty eyes. Her mouth opened to give her answer.12

Blam!13

'Boom! Head shot!' yelled a voice.14

Charles' eyes widened in horror as Samantha's head exploded in a shower of red. He swallowed with difficulty as her body tottered, then with slow grace fell backwards onto the now - somewhat - red grass.15

He stared in shock at her, his mouth opening and closing like a fish out of water as he tried to comprehend what had happened.16

For a full minute he stared at her body before, finally, he spoke.17

'...Samantha...?' he croaked, before lapsing again into silence.18

The sounds of children playing in the park filtered through the trees.19

As the shock of what happened left, he scowled as he said, 'Aww dammit, not again.' 20

He stood up, pocketed the ring, and stalked sullenly off into the gathering dusk.21

Author notes

Err.... To many late nights, and long days at work? Haha, enjoy.

DoozerDan's me name, for whoever was asking.

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  • Shahbaz
    October 9
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    it was nice but had a unintresting ending

    beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 2, ending: 2, dialog: 4, characters: 3.

  • rustic
    October 4

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    Yup

    didn't see that coming and the fact that it happened again.

    Its like what killed her ? ..or every time he proposes, his just made fiancee gets their head exploded? haha

    funny but just a bit messed up if you get what I mean.

  • Cherrylv
    October 2

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    Well I'm afraid I am a terrible romantic!!
    But I am broad minded enough to see the humour in this piece. I can see that a lot of others did also judging by the number of awards it has been given

    Cherry xxx


  • F66142589
    September 30
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    I hate romances too. Great title you have there, and the best ending EVER.

    plot: 1, ending: 5.


  • Mike Driscoll jnr silver member
    September 14

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    If only this happened in Grease when at the start of the film they're on the beach lol, this was so funny, I kind of had that feeling that something would happen but what really made me laugh was the yell of 'Head shot!' LOL, that sealed it for me!

    Spoof-tastic!

    Mike


    • DoozerDan silver member
      September 14
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      Indeed. If only it happened in a lot of films and books.

      Glad you enjoyed it.


  • ManualLoveLetter
    September 3
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    This is funny shit I like it..very much


  • Smexi-gurl
    September 2
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    Umm...the ending was a bit odd but other than that it was good.


  • therenaissancegirl
    August 31

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    lmfao!!! "Aww dammit, not again." What the hell were you thinking? Well, whatever was going through your head, it was brilliant hahaha great job on all the trophies, by the way

    Renaissance


  • Benwater
    August 16
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    Hahahaha, I laughed my ass off. Hahahaha sick


  • patchy
    August 4

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    what. the. crap?! haha that was amazing. reminded me of a video game called gears of war. when you snipe them in the head, thier heads explodes, blood pours out, and the guys next to them act like nothing happened. hahaha. great romance story!


  • demonkitty
    August 3

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    this is hilarious. You would corner the market at romantic stories. I certainly had butterflies


  • Unkillable Monster
    July 29

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    AMAZINGG. Reminds me of Grand Theft Auto, of one of the random couples walking about. Usually they run when you shoot one but sometimes, the other person stares at the body and walks off.


  • FreakshowAkaChristy
    July 21
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    Best freaking romance piece ive ever read!! man, if u wrote romance novels, i would read them. that means a lot coming formm me, lol. Very nicely done. Ah, when she got shot I coculdnt stop laughing! I thought it was just me being my warped self, but apparently others thought it was funny too. yay! Amazing, so glad I read it. Check out some of my work?


  • BloodRedPrimrose
    July 13

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    Haha, that made me laugh so hard. My friend gave me a funny look, oh and I agree your not the best romance writer


  • CantYouHearTheDrums
    July 12

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    He he he!!!!! Funny!!!!!!!! (by the way, I just walked over a cliff, hit my head on a rock on the bottom of the sea, found a bottle of 100 year old ale from a pirate ship wreck and drank it, then floated to the surface and died)

  • johnomaha
    July 11

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    Not surprising, given the fake pastels of the intro. I recommend you take time off adolescent "shooter" games and dig for the  courage to actually fall in love with someone. Believe me its not a shampoo commercial, but one wild ride!

    • DoozerDan silver member
      July 12
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      *Scratches head* And who said I wasn't in love with someone? Or haven't been in the past? This is NOT a satire of romance, it's a parody of romance BOOKS.

  • Adinatak
    July 10

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    Oh GAWD I loved that so much! Best romance story I've ever read!


  • Raining.Fire
    July 5

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    That was AWESOME!!!! Totally hilarious! I definatlly did not see that last part coming. What did he mean by "Not again"? It was very well written, and I liked it a lot! Bravo!


  • SympatheticMisery
    June 30
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    That was absolutely hilarious!!
    It was all sweet in the beginning; complete and clique...until the random "Headshot!" is thrown in there.
    I thought it was amazingly funny when you added the "Not again...", honestly.
    Amazing job you did! No wonder you have so many trophies from this one alone!


  • Carina.J.LR
    June 26

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    wow, that was soo unexpected lol, nice ending


  • Myra La-Ryn
    June 20
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    Well that was.... unexpected.


  • Wintery Kristen
    June 20

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    ......um.......I have a question......why umm............................................... why did you have her shot in the head? And I like the dude's response. "aw man, not again" The he just leaves. I though that was funny *chuckles to herself* but yeah, I really CAN see why you don't write romance! U rock. I like romances with emo boys, I like writing adventures and stories that involve swords and love and kissing and realization about love and I LOVE EMO BOYS! Wow. That was random....Thats ho I roll!


  • Queenie-Chan
    June 18
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    very funny lol i love it ^_^


  • Mad Ink
    June 14
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    l-o-l

    fantastically funny! love love loooooooove it!!!! You're good!


  • ForeverUnloved
    June 10
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    I liked it. It's very well written


  • Lawrie gold member
    June 10

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    Absolutely-flamin'-fantastic.

    Brilliant ending to a great spoof.


  • mememe6
    June 9
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    well, slightly, but what i really didn't see coming was how he walked away, almost uncaring.


  • Raeyle
    May 29

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    This is the work of someone who is completely bonkers.
    Interesting right. I was trying to figure out how the head shot thing came in. Was wondering if he was actually a game character or something of that nature.

    I found your last bit of dialogue, well rather monologue than dialogue, " Aww dammit, not again" quite amusing.

    Was crazy that he just walked off without oh i dont know more emotions than shock?

  • alwaysrockon
    May 25

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    no, i didnt see it coming but that dosnt make it good. just because it strays from the norm of cheesy non-cheesy-romance dosnt make it what all these people below are saying, that its good.

    it seems as though with a little gore, non emotionality, and twists they are appeased in a literary sense. the writing was not that great, and there really wasnt much to the story.

    a story does not have to be realistic in the least to be good but sometimes it can be easily overdone. in this case the entire thing seems ludicrous. shure shure it works as a great twist, but not really. anything can have a twist thrown in or two, but that does not make it good. for instance, yes, you could end a child story with a "twist" with mr. rogers being a psychopath but that dosn't make it "jenuis!!" as people below me are suggesting. especially not if you never became attached to any of the charachters.
    yes, i unnerstand it was meant to be a joke, but i guess i simply dont find it amusing.

    sorry bout the rant, i jus didnt like the story or the praise that it is recieving.

    • cooliobean13
      July 21
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      Bah! Humbug!

    • DoozerDan silver member
      May 25
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      *Watches the point of the skit soar overhead*

      My turn for a rant! \o/

      There is one main purpose for this skit (I'd hardly call it a story, it's too short, it's a skit, a scene. Whatever), and that is to take the mickey out of romance story. My firing squad for a genre that makes me vomit. The way I went about that was write a really cheesy scene and shoot it in the head. In the balls would have been preferred, but this way worked better for the geek reference.

      If I made the story good with emotionally compelling characters I'd be shooting myself in the foot. As I said, the point of the story is to poke fun at everything romance stories are, and then kill it and end it the way I'd like them to. With blood, and guts.

      As for being a 'not that well written' story? Just 'cause you don't like something, kiddo, don't make it bad. It's grammatically perfect, and flows well considering the ending. And that's the opinion of people who have been writing for decades. When your writing is grand I'll come back and fix this if you say it's poorly written.

      I got an English sense of humour, too, one which is usually lost on American's, so, not worried if I get someone who don't like it. Show me a story which everyone loves. *Shrugs*

      *Ponders adding something about 'ur just jealous'*

      Naw. Everyone is entitled to their own opinion.


      • DanQnA gold member
        May 25
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        Opinions

        Psssst, just saying:

        There's pie over there --->

  • First-Mate gold member
    May 23
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    That was funny and i was so getting into it and then blam!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Duality.
    May 17
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    That was funny...

    It was super funny! I really loved it. It was romantic, horrific AND funny! Gosh, you're good!


  • Clary-SeleneGangsta gold member
    May 6
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    psht haha no i didnt see that coming at all good work


  • Shadow-Kissed
    May 3

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    Spectacular! I really love this piece. Especially the ending, 'Aww dammit, not again.' This was brilliant and, well, highly entertaining. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • simply.me
    May 1
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    ahahah 'oh no, not again.'
    LMFAO! a very, very nice break from cheesy romance. ugh.


  • Riftkin
    April 4

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    Oh .. I could see the ring coming out of his pocket.. but no way was I seeing the ending to this one.. it was perfect.. and like the song says.. "another one bites the dust"


  • Angelic-Dream-State
    March 24

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    yeah did not see that coming. yes its clear you don't write romance but it was good it made me laugh lol good job.


  • vamplover22907
    March 23
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    I didn't see it coming, wow she was killed. Wa wa waah

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • Kalee gold member
    March 23

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    Nope. Didn't see that coming! And I understand clearly why you don't write romance. LMAO On the other hand, I bet you are the life of a party!
    Although, touching and then quirky. A perfect combination for romances these days..better yet..the set up for a perfect "bro"mance story.

  • xXMidnightSkyXx
    March 23

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    Wow.... That was really good. I didn't see ANYTHING that was coming. I loved the sweetness in the beginning and in the end- just brushing it off!!!


  • JessieH
    March 23

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    You're right i didn't see that coming. Its kind of vague in a good way. It gives your reader the freedom to get so many different stories out of one.


  • Neolittlefish
    March 23
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    sorry I forgot the applause
    Here you are!

  • Neolittlefish
    March 23

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    Good gravy you gave me a heart attack! I really like dry humour though so you ticked the box for that. And also I dislike cheesy romances so I love it when people make fun of them, so have another tick in some other box!
    Well done, I'll definately check out more of your writing.
    Neo


  • artaq gold member
    March 21
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    Awesome!

    All I can say is So Cool...
    Loved it.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Keirii
    March 21

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    Well you certainly caught me off guard!!!

    Hahaha...

    I really liked this one. The pleasantful romance
    in the beginning was well done; it had a certain
    innocence about it that I liked.

    Good job!!!

  • adamcieslicki
    March 18

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    Not bad at all

    Certainly a different kind of story than that of what I would normally read, but the twist at the end was certainly interesting. What surprised me was the seeming lack of emotion when the male saw the head being blown off the woman, it seemed a little unnatural. All in all I liked it


  • IceIceBaby
    March 18

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    I toatally didn't see that!!!!! Wow, your good. Loved the biggining, it was amazin..................... Awesome!!!!!


  • CrystalTigress
    March 18

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    didn't see that coming

    nice job the humor behind makes it actually a lot more funny that depressing...which is great. You did wonderfully. Started out perfect with the romance but then again this makes like a great prequel for a revenge plot story.

    • DoozerDan silver member
      March 18
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      Ah good, it's supposed to be funny. I'd be worried if I depressed everyone with this.

      I think I shall probably leave this as it is, no sequels. I tried writing a second part to this once, but decided that that would just spoil the short, abrupt, humour of the piece.

      Thanks for the read.


  • lavanya
    March 17

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    You really have nice sense of humor...dry and dark . atleast from this story i got idea about your style of writting.
    very intresting and funny story ...dark too. good job D.


  • CeliaBby
    March 15
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    OMFG!!

    that shit was funny and supperr goooddd!!!!!


  • snoble
    March 13
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    intresting creepy intresting but intresting. thank you for entering it


  • Asonine
    March 11
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    haha bloody brilliant mate, I loved it, this is my type of tale here haha veyr good wit lol


  • PixieDrug
    March 9
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    HA!

    bloody brilliant!
    going to have to see some more of this genius witing lol


  • MorbidGarden
    March 9

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    WTF?? you made my heart leap to my throat and then you made me eat it...

    GREAT JOB...rarely can a writer make me to this...

    would love to read more in this vein...*goes off to read some more of your stuff*


  • Heropsycho
    March 9

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    HAHAHA that was actually great! Sounds like a VC Andrews story plus way too much Halo or something hahaha.


    • DoozerDan silver member
      March 9
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      Course it was great.

      Heh, funny that everyone says Halo, it's actually from a Counter Strike parody.


  • Rorshach gold member
    March 4

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    Wow

    Unbelievable. Clive Barker in the making i would say. I would advise you to read Mr B Gone to get more tips on how to sell, sell sell.


    • DoozerDan silver member
      March 4
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      This was supposed to be awful, incase you hadn't realised.

  • lovetowrite
    March 4

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    I did NOT see that coming! But wow the beginning I liked because you did a good job with the whole romantic part.
    Q: i am not quite sure what happened there at the end. Can you explain it?

    beginning: 5, language: 3, plot: 1, ending: 1, dialog: 4, characters: 3.


  • Neon.Rose
    March 3
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    Gaaahh!! That was sad! and the ending made me mad, but in a good way. Grr. lol.


  • SoundInkMusic
    March 2

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    Nope, I did not; but the surprise was largely what made me laugh A lot of humor packed into very few words.

    "Awww dammit, not again" - best part of the piece, by far! Nicely done.

  • VariousSingularity
    March 1

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    "Head shot"-My Halo dork friends use that one. When I played and achieved such a feat, I said something similar. What I said was a term more commonly used in porn films, but it did end in 'shot.' Like I've mentioned before, my jokes are bad...But some of them found it funny...I suck at Halo, by the way.

    Anyway...You, sir, are quite possibly the funniest man with a pen. Well, technically speaking, I guess it would be a keyboard. But that's not the point, now is it?

    Contrary to the implication made by the title of this, I think you should write more romance. Reams of it, actually.

    Here, sir, have some more of those creepy clapping things to aid this story into Storywrite domination...

    • DoozerDan silver member
      March 2
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      Yes, it's quite a popular little saying. The 'Boom! Headshot!' comes from a YouTube series called FPS Doug. Or something like that. He's the chappy who says that. He's quite funny, you may enjoy it. It is scary how much that guy moves just like someone out of Counter-Strike. >.<

      Shall I write some stories by pen so you can say that? Thank you though, glad you enjoy my little pieces of weirdness.

      Hmm. Reams you say? *Ponders* There are only so many times one can pull off an ending like this before it becomes old. I should totally write some more zombie romance though. Nothing like a bit of necrophilia.

      Muwahaha! More clappies. *calculates where these clappies will take him to* Hmm, fourth most popular story! #1 will take a few hundred more though. >.>

      *cough*

      Glad you enjoyed.


  • Richard Paranoia
    February 28
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    Fun

    Hehe. By your title I thought something like that might happen. Fun.


  • Hinata-is-me silver member
    February 26

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    "aww, damnit, not again!" oh wow. talk about a love story gone bad! the twisted, dark humor of the situation in the end made me laugh. is this how all your love stories turn out? you seem to have gotten quite a large ammount of trophies for this peice!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • sberendt gold member
    February 26

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    I loved the whole thing, especially the unexpected, darkly humorous ending. Nice title, too, by the way; it's fairly fitting. ^_^

    ending: 5, dialog: 5.


  • ShimmeringMirage
    February 26
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    WOW YOU WON A LOT OF TROPHIES FOR THIS!!!!!!!!!!!


  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    February 26

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    LOL shocking and interesting twist- love the dark humor!

    Great write


  • Misamiera
    February 26

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    LOL... No, I didn't see that one coming, although I did have a vague idea from the title. It was absolutely hilarious. I don't particularly like romance, either, so this was a very refreshing change from the regular sappy romance. I loved Charles' words at the end. By all means, he should be screaming out loud. 'course, it's happened before... lol. Wouldn't it have been funny if Samantha had said 'no' and THEN gotten shot? Lol. Something to think about.

    Strangely enough, you've won enough trophies with this story that you honestly don't even NEED to write sappy romance. D: I'm insanely jealous.

    Misamiera


  • Mag the Chodja gold member
    February 26

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    LMAO Ok. Did not see that particular ending coming.
    The romantic portion was a little too cheesy, but I guess you were going for that. I guess your title was right. xD


  • gabriel85reborn
    February 26

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    Ha! I love it. I only hope whoever shot the would-be fiance had the decency to stop by the body and taunt the deceased before calling it a day. Hilarious.


    • DoozerDan silver member
      February 26
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      Haha. I'm sure he did. Or her, maybe it was Charles' mother.


  • XxXDreamWeaverXxX
    February 25

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    Lol, I kinda saw somthing bad coming, I knew from the tital.
    you are so good at humour!
    *doubles over laughing*
    You stories are so good

    ~ Cat


  • Devolution
    February 25
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    That was one of the most amazing things I've ever read.

    beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 2.


  • DanQnA gold member
    February 25
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    Oh, forgot clappy thingies. Have a few for the effort.

  • DanQnA gold member
    February 25

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    Mind-blowing! Literally!

    I like. Romance is not my favorite category, so this makes a great romance! I noticed a semi-colon, which was a bit surprising, since I rarely see them used. The beginning was a bit soppy, and the ending was wonderfully harsh. I had the feeling that if I'd been there, it would have been very amusing in a dark sort of way, but nothing would have pleased me more than the scream "Boom! Headshot" It's the epitome of what a good headshot should be. Sudden and unexpected, like the twist in this story, but you went one further and it "is" the twist in this story.


  • C.rimsonQ.uill
    February 25
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    Holy Crap!

    That was so awesum! I love the twist! Again? lol Gr8 write!!!!


  • iPoopAThug
    February 17

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    Nope

    Hahahhaa. Boom headshot, internet meme right there. Gotta say this was hilarious, I also loved how you put the "dammit, not again" thing. You gotta love when they use that in anything, books, movies, and pretty much any other media. Thanks for this. Finally a author with a great sense of humor and a love of screwing with the reader. Great work.

    • DoozerDan silver member
      February 17
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      Woot! Finally another reader who recognises it. Not many people can place that one, heh.

      Yup, nothing like twisting a readers head of part way through the story.

      Thanks for reading, commenting, enjoying and applauding!

  • cooliobean13
    February 15
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    HILARIOUS! I LOVE IT!

  • everlight
    February 15
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    Slightly demented and weird and very shocking! Nice job.


  • Serpentine silver member
    February 13

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    Oooh that was really gross and horrible but I still freakin' loved it. I liked how you made it all corny in the beginning and then her head exploded...LOL. Twisted, awful, and insanely good! Nicely done and good luck in the contest.

    ~ Cheers
    Ink


  • caitecola
    February 13

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    Why did she die? I don't understand the "not again" part. It's good for the contest, but I don't get why she died, or how............. is that just me?

    • DoozerDan silver member
      February 13
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      Ok, question time!

      Why: 'Cause.
      Not Again: 'Cause it makes people wonder.
      How: Guns go blam, and they make heads explode in a shower of red, and when someone says headshot it generally implies something (the head) was shot which is what guns also do. *wonders how come people don't see that*

      • caitecola
        February 13
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        Response

        I understand the story of course, and the wonder of it, I am only saying the reason I was confused is because I am used to explanations, though, in your story the lack of explanation of the "head shot" or "gun man" leaves the reader with the question, "What the heck just happened?" I am guessing that is what you were going for. Of course I see that she was shot with a gun, I just keep wondering why and it makes me wonder why there is such familiarity with Charles in the fact that he can take is his girl to the park and have her head explode and for him to react in such a nonchalant way. But that's just me I guess. There is nothing wrong with your story, and I enjoyed reading it. I suppose I'm just accustomed to adding detail behind everything, and you're more of a make it out for yourself kind of writer. I could be wrong, but it's just what I'm thinking. Anyway, this comment is getting fairly long so I'll leave you be now. Have a good day!


  • Bernice DeLucchi gold member
    February 10

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    A most surprising ending! Rather gory and shocking, but I expect that was the intention!

    Very well-written! Another writer on this site who really is talented!!!

    • DoozerDan silver member
      February 10
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      Why thank you.

      This is what Look, Ma! No Hands! would be like if I removed the end off it, short and twisted. *Ponders* I think I will remove the end off it actually.


      • Bernice DeLucchi gold member
        February 11
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        I agree! I love stories which end that way ... shocking and twisted ... hahaha!

        • DoozerDan silver member
          February 11
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          Well, I shortened it. It's shocking and twisted now.

          Heh, most of my stories end like that... I should write a story without a twist on the end, then everyone who reads all my stuff will get an ending they never saw coming. xD


  • Be.Your.Own.Hero
    February 1

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    Four words my friend:

    LMAO

    xD

    That was totally uncalled for, but so brilliant

    xoxo
    ~*Princess*~

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Radiance
    February 1

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    Once I got to the "Boom! Head shot!" part, I was certain I'd read this before. Even so, the end still took me off-guard. This piece is hilarious, in a morbid and dark-ish way. Charles's reaction to Samantha's sudden... explosion... was interesting. My pity for him seriously diminished when he just left her body lying there.

    Enjoyably unexpected. Thank you for sharing!


  • Amaylisse
    January 31

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    Nope I didn't see that coming. Man that was extremely funny! I absolutely loved it! I love your humour and you don't see that in everyday life! LOL. =)

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 4.

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