Asher, Asher

The children linked their small hands and danced in a circle, chanting:1

“Ring around a rosy2

Pocket full of posies3

Ashes, Ashes4

We all fall down!”5

Once they reached the last line of the age old nursery rhyme, they threw themselves to the ground, laughing wildly. Watching them, Omri let a bittersweet smile touch his lips and then banished it. To the children, dressed in their traveling clothes, this was just a grand excursion to a neighboring country. The mothers who waited for the steam engine to bear them away saw this trip for what it really was – an evacuation. A woman approached the laughing children. Omri couldn’t hear her words, but judging from the look on the woman’s face and expressions the children returned to her it was obvious she was scolding them.6

Let them have their fun, Omri thought. This is just the beginning. Let them have fun while they still can, before the war truly comes and they are forced to face the horrible truths of life. He turned his focus back to the children, who were being herded toward the waiting railcars, sullen looks on their faces. Omri felt for them, and almost wished he had a seat reserved on the car, but as leader of the Peacekeepers, he knew that was impossible. At first, Omri had fought against evacuation, but upon revisiting the issue he found he could not in good conscience stall the evacuation any longer. Fighting could break out any day. Peace talks between the two opposing sides were growing more and more strained, with neither side willing to compromise.7

One child broke away from the woman and ran back to where they’d been dancing in a circle. Mischief shone in this little one’s eyes as she belted out the last two lines of the rhyme in defiance. “Ashes! Ashes! We all fall down!” The child threw herself to the ground. Giggling, the other children followed suit, collapsing onto the ground where they stood – an immovable force. Now the mothers saw fit to involve themselves and began calling various children’s names, the disapproving tones unmistakable. The children obeyed these calls. They jumped up and ran to the railcars, finding their families, laughing the entire time. The woman who had originally admonished the children shook her head joined the evacuees.8

“Ashes…” Omri found himself repeating quietly. “Asher…” The word morphed into the name without much thought, since that name was the cause of the entire problem. It wasn’t fair to blame the situation entirely on Prince Asher, but perhaps if the prince hadn’t suddenly become a recluse, if the King and Queen, his parents, hadn’t died mysteriously . . . Omri put those thoughts out of his head. As a Peacekeeper, he couldn’t allow his thoughts to become biased. It was his job to avert the war, and lately he felt like he’d been doing a fairly shoddy job of it. No, it wouldn’t do to dwell on the past. He had to think of the future. Rubbing his temples with his fingertips, Omri tried to stave off the massive headache that was looming. Failing that, he headed through the nearly deserted city until he reached the place where he had tethered his horse. Mounting the animal, he urged it into a gallop and slipped out of town. He needed to be alone, and he needed time to think.9


***Go on to part I: http://storywrite.com/story/139920***

Author notes

And now we're kickin' it old school. For reals, yo. *lol* ok just kidding. Actually I started this story in 1994 or 1995, now it's back with a vengeance. Who knows, maybe this thing will turn out good after all and I'll get it published. It's kind of a back-burner project so don't hold your breath. And please, if you take the time to read it, let me know what you think, what could be improved upon etc. After all that IS what this site is for.

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  • Fizbop
    February 5, 2008
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    This is very intreeging I'm currious as to what may happen


  • KodyBoye
    January 24, 2008

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    I liked this. I always like stories in the older times that don't really imply the fantasy genre. I LIKE fantasy, but most of the fantasy nowadays is TOO out there. Tamora Pierce is my favorite fantasy author, but Garth Nix's Abhorsen trilogy created my favorite fantasy world.

    I'll stop there and say that this looks like it's going to turn out very well. Send me a message when more goes up, will you?

    Thanks, and good luck with it. I couldn't find anything that boldly standed out in bright-pink colors grammar and spelling wise, so it's all good. : )

    ~ Kody


  • loyda
    January 23, 2008
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    at first i thought Omri was a girl, and then i was confused wether Omri is the prince.

    another thing, which war is happening in this story?
    is it a war that really happened or a fantasy one?

    anyways i really liked the whole idea, and i wish to read more.


    • Araina
      January 23, 2008
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      Thanks for commenting! Asher is the prince, and the war is a fantasy one. Things will get clearer as the story progresses. Thanks so much for the feedback. I'll try to revise this and make it clearer.