(This is for my character Selene. She is one of the main character's in "One Fated Nightmare"... Several chapters are up now)1
My name is Selene Hope LeVox (Pronounced Luh-Vox) and I was born on a warm summer day thirty three years ago in my hometown of London, England. I suppose I am pretty, although I don't like to brag on myself. My hair is a dark shade of brown and my eyes are a very deep shade of hazel. As far as my weight go's, you could say I'm pretty much average. I never have focused to much on my looks though. Now my sister, she is another story!2
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Nothing about my childhood was very normal unless you consider being drug to charity events, fund raisers, cotillions... Oh how I hated those cotillions, you know I never, not even once, danced at one of them with any of the other guests. That is, unless dancing with my older sister at one counted. 4
Other than that I would stay off to myself in the side lines. I guess you can say I was pretty shy and I really wasn't like most of the others there. Sure I came from a wealthy family just like the others, but money really wasn't a priority for me it never has been even to this day. When people go to talking about stocks, bonds and counting up the abundance of their riches the only thing I want to do is run. I was always bored to tears with their money obsessions. 5
See, my father Lorenzo, is a CEO at this computer company that's based out of Liverpool. His father before him, who was every bit as wealthy, was the one who started the company. My father travels alot and these days I rarely ever even see him, it's actually been that way most all of my life. My mother, she was a fashion designer. She designed the most beautiful gowns I had ever seen in my life. Once she designed this multi-platinum wedding dress for a princess. It had to be the most amazingly stunning dress I had ever seen! 6
It reminded me of something you would have seen in those Disney fairytales. It had the long white train, the delicate lace and the meticulously placed beads that lined it. She was such an incredible designer and we were always close to each other. No matter how busy our mother was she always made time for me and Sara. Sara is my older sister and my best friend. We have been through everything together, she in some ways is like my rock. I always found her to be so much stronger than I am and I love her dearly.7
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Our mother was tragically killed just short of a year ago. I still wake up in tears sometimes thinking back to that night that she was taken from us. I miss her so much. I know it's cruel of me to say this, but I always wished it had been my father that night instead of my mother... I still find myself almost picking up the phone to call her, then I realize I can never call her again. I go to her graveside quite often and I pray that she can hear me up in heaven when I talk to her.9
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She would be so proud that I finally finsihed my training to become a crime scene investigator or CSI as we all say for short. A rich girl becoming a cop, who, would have ever guessed? Mother was always so proud of me for deciding I wanted to become one but, father... Well he couldn't careless. He finds the fact of the matter, foolish to be honest. Father never much took interest in either of us kids. Sometimes I wonder if he really wanted us or if it was only our mother who did.11
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I went to Oxford university and even graduated at the very top of my class. After graduating, I then took classes to further my CSI training. Now that I am officially certified and licensed. I plan to apply for a job soon in the London Crime Division. I must admit to being a little nervous about that, but I can't wait to follow my dreams. I always wanted to do something in life that mattered, something to help others and now I finally have my chance to do so!13
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As for a personal life, I can't much say I have one of those. Maybe I'm just to picky. I don't know I guess it comes from reading all those fairytales as a kid. You know, Cinderella, Snow White, Sleeping Beauty. The whole thing of Prince Charming coming to rescue his ill fated princess. I want a love like that so bad my sister says I'm crazy, that men like that do not exist. However, I am still holding out hope that someday my Prince will come. Silly as that may sound, it's truly how I feel.15
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I have always believed in fate and destiny. I firmly stand by my belief that when it's meant for me to find someone, I will. I'm not about to go out looking for love, that is not how you find it. Love is something that just happens. I sometimes get the feeling I have already met him and didn't even know it. Who knows, maybe one of these days it will happen. Maybe, if I'm lucky, my Prince really will come along and sweep me off my feet. For now, I am happily living the single life.17
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I have a good feeling though that things might change for me soon. The journey of starting a new career will be like opening another chapter in my life. One that I have been ready for my entire life. Where the road leads only time can tell... I can only take it one day at a time and hope for the best in life.19
Click here to read Chapter #1 of "One Fated Nightmare"
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A contest entry
- Bios by Mel-the-Believer.
100 points, ended February 19, 2008, 16 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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Good descriptions and very good. I usually avoid biographies but this was an exception.
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As always very good with a powerfull use of description.
notes:
4'you know I never not even once danced at one of them' I think this should be 'you know I never, not even once, danced at one of them'
5'the abundance of there riches' replace there with their
11'Well he could careless.' should this be 'Well he couldn't careless.'beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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Great job on your biography SeleneStone!
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It's great to have something to base the rest of the things I've learned about Selene on... I'm still curious though, as to what happened regarding the college incident that caused her to carry a gun around all the time though.
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I am thinking of bringing more in about that in my next chapter as a conversation between her and Luke. She has a very good reason for having that with her. I have been meaning to do bios for Sara and Alison too, but... I keep trying to do to many things at once lol. Thanks for the read and comment
Joann
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Lover her!
Selene sounds really awesome! I'm glad I read her biography so that when you post more of the story, I'll be able to relate to her better. She's a really great character! And so is Luke! Great job. :]
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Like with Luke, I really enjoyed reading this bio of Selene. Again, it really shows more about the character, and really tells alot about her life! Great work
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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she sounds like an amazing and awesome lady. you have made her just as real as you made luke. i bet the story is going to rock with both of them in it. i noticed that your screen name is her first name and luke's last name...how cool is that! to take your characters and make them from your screen name or vice versa since i'm not sure which came first. this is my first week back to storywrite since they split. i finally noticed some friends from allpoetry coming over here. guess we put this site behind us when it separated. maybe it can be as lively as the other site some day. good luck in the contest, DARK.
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I just finished reading the first chapter of your story that I found this character in. I find her smart, sexy and a very friendly lady. Love the Bio on her as it makes me think back to the story she's in and it gives more credit to the story itself. Will be tuning into the other chapter that you have posted within a day or so. Good luck in the contest.
Ted E
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I loved this! The description was amazing, and you could really get involved with the characters. And you can really understand what this girl's going through... now, Im going to go and read chapter 1! Lots of love, Ashley.
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Thanks Selene is a character I have grown quite attached to (Hence my SW name even lol). I created her on an rpg board and when it went down hill there was no way I was giving her up. Hope you enjoy what I have so far on the story!
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I really liked her in the story, but I like her even more now that I have read her background. Sweet, keep it up!
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Now this character defenitely sounds interesting. I like her. She's cool. I may have to go read that story now. Thank you so much for entering. Good luck. God Bless!
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Quite an interesting character.
p2 'their money obsessions', p3 'See, my father', 'him, who was every bit as wealthy as he, was', 'him, it's actually', 'My mother, she', 'seen, it reminded', 'friend. We', 'together, she is', p4 'us. God, I miss her so much!', 'her, then I realize', 'cop, who', 'less. He finds the fact of the matter, foolish', p5 'class. After graduating, I', p6 'life, I can't', 'picky, I don't know. I guess', 'kid, you know, Cinderalla', 'crazy, that men', 'someone, I will.', 'love, that is not how you find it. Love is', 'know it. Who knows, maybe', 'feet, but for now', p7 'soon. Starting my', 'life. Where the road leads, only time will tell....'
I think you have a good character and a female as a lead character is timely. You have a lot of run-on sentences. I tried to help you out with them.
Andy
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I'm glad I helped.
I noticed you have a couple of 'but(s)' with the comma in the wrong place that I missed. The comma should go on the word before but. Example: "I try, but sometimes I mess up anyway."
That's true of all of us.
I have a female superhero and a female serial killer as female leads. Different stories, of course.
Andy
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