I sit waiting for the test to come back....Not for me but for my friend. He lay motionless on the bed. He had been sick for awhile now....Seemed every time I turned around he was ill. We use to go out every weekend and paint the town red...We filled the streets with laughter and the nights with love.....Friends was what we were...Well to him I was a friend but to me he was so much more. The first time we kissed was as if my entire being lit up...One night he forgot about our friendship and made love to me so passionately...My first but his last....He just erased that part and treated me like he always did as just a friend..I did not say anything ....It was better to have him as a friend than nothing at all.....I watched him as he went with other girls and when they broke his heart I was there for him to lean on...My insides would crumble but I would keep strong so he could smile again.1
As my thoughts were interrupted by the Doctor...I felt a cold draft pass by me...." I have some bad news" explained the Doctor... Tears filled my eyes " This young man has AIDS"2
I gasped "Oh my God" I felt the world start to spin....My heart skipped beats. I didn't think I would stop spinning and then the doctor continued..."He will not recover from this illness, his immune system has failed, I give him a month " I then glanced over to his dying body and forgot about myself...And cried for him...I wept tears of sorrow and prayed that his pain would end. I prayed for time to change what was happening. I watched before me what would happen to me but I was not selfish for I loved him and never got the chance to tell him....My life would die along with him and our memories would be edged in stone for my heart became hard. I was being ripped from this world and had to watch the most important person in my life die....I had to watch my own death. 3
Each day I spent with him I would tell about all the things we use to do....I would take his hand into mine and close my eyes and reminisce on old times....My fate was sealed along with his...My memories will stop with him...4
I remember that last day when he left me....When his machine started beeping...before the nurses and doctors came running in I bent down and whispered in his ear what I longed to tell him for so long....Now I lay in this same bed only into my thoughts outside my body ready to go on to another place......I had came to realize the true meaning to love...That love is not selfish and its not just about one person but about two people....Even in death I still love him...I took on his mistakes because I loved him....And now I die because of it...I would have died a thousand times just for him to live....now I die to be with him....There amongst the light I see a hand and I grab a hold to find myself in his arms...He had heard what I said in his ear! He spoke to me " You are never too late to say how you feel, Your words let me go to heal here in a place where I watched over you as you did me whispering I Love You in your ear."5
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My inspiration was first just from love and how much someone could really love even if one had an incurable illness and if they indeed recieved the illness from them. Love sometimes to everyday people seems so complex but what we do not know is love can be so much more when death comes from it and that is when a persons love comes to test. This poem was about loving without being selfish and self absorbed, about loving even after death. Unconditional love, I wonder if the person the one is with would still love them if they found out they had AIDS or would they be angry and push them away as if they were a murder. Thank you so much for your comment, I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it.
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Awww I'm crying. This is so sweet and sad. Most people will probably say that it's not that good because it's short, but you know what, you've done a hell of a job putting a lot of emotions into something this short. I like short short stories. I don't understand why a short story has to be 50 pages for you to get simple feelings, which you can get in this much space. I'm in awe, you've done an amazing job. Where did you get your inspiration, if you don't mind me asking? Congratulations on an amazing piece and I wish you luck in the contest.
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Great
This is the best short story that I have ever read, I know what it feels like watching someone you love die. This was very well written and You should have won that! this was awsome.. it actually taught me something.. right now I like this guy and I am too scared to tell him how I feel.. I wrote a poem about it and this makes me wanna tell him but if you read my poem dreams then you will understand why I dont want to!! Awsome write cant wait to read more from you! -
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This piece is gripping, a beautifully told tragedy. The story is made even more realistic and horrifying with it being centered around the AIDS epidemic which ravages the entire world. I have sat watching my grandmother die, and even one of my best friends, but I don't know what I would be reduced to if I were to only realize love after losing the only person who ever showed it to me.
A tear is shed at the conclusion of this story. I would hope that, for you, this is fiction instead of reality. 
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Wow. this is simply beautiful. did you win the contest? because if you didn't you should have. i loved every bit of this. the story is so amazing and the last paragraph was awesome. my favourite line was "I was being ripped from this world and had to watch the most important person in my life die....I had to watch my own death." this piece stunned me and i haven't read something this good in a long time. thank you so much for sharing. This is an amazing poem, very beautiful and incredibly touching. I hope this was not a real experience for you. And if it is I’m so sorry for you. This is beautiful.
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wow you have so much talent I love to read your stories they seem to grasp the audience ...like a good book. keep up the good work twin!
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Thank you for your comment
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Thanks for your comment! Meant so much to me.
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The contest was judged today and I never won. But thank you so much for your comment.
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Great write
This story is absolutely wonderful. It really captures the feeling of having a loved one die due to AIDS. I for one, probably couldn't even begin to imagine the pain a victim's friend or family member would endure. Good luck, very well done. -
i can't find the words ... i have been there.. and now im speechless... i don't know how to judge your work cause it aint some piece of art its a memory from the heart...
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Aww, Thanks means a lot to me that everyone is taking time to read my story....
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girl thats gooder than i done on mine........ i'm giving you an appluase....hope you win...
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Trista it's me Logan Debbies daughter I think that yours should win... it knocks the socks off you....shep606@hotmail.com
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Heart touching write, I wonder if it's fiction or not. It made me think of a young woman I know with HIV. I've never asked her how she got it though. You definately got my attention with this wonderfully written piece.
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flawless
jaw drops holy shit. this is simply beautiful. did you win the contest? because if you didn't you should have. i loved every bit of this. the story is so amazing and the last paragraph was awesome. my favorite line was "I was being ripped from this world and had to watch the most important person in my life die....I had to watch my own death." this piece stunned me and i haven't read something this good in a long time. thank you so much for sharing.
RacHel
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awww this is sooooo sad!
but really really good. lots and lots of emotion... very well done!
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Oh, wow, this one got me. I love how you told the story for one, you started off with this, the way youintroduce the character and your guys fun time together gave youa real feel for the person and then I got chills when it was aids... I lost a close friend that I grew up with since a little girl, considered him the uncle I never had... he had Aids and I watched him get sicker and sicker and being that I was a little girl I didn't understand, and then he was just gone one day
Wow, I still have chills from reading this thanks for the read 
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This is very well done,
i like all aspects of it
because it shows us how
important it is to forgive
and is very direct. It is
healing poetry. I like this.
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wow. That was powerful. I don't know what to say. You left me speachless. Beautiful. Thats all I can say.
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nifty
wow....this is amazing....i love anything that has to do with love even when its sad....this is really powerful....especially "Even in death I still love him...I took on his mistakes because I loved him....And now I die because of it...I would have died a thousand times just for him to live....now I die to be with him" this is great love is a very powerful thing even death cannot stop true love it can only delay it for awhile -
Woa girl...I don't know where this come from...but it is very strong...You wanted to write as good as I..heart's daughter..you have surpassed me....I am so prowd.
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Incredible
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wow i really love this story. i love stories that make me cry and this one did just that. i could feel the pain, and sorrow coming right through the words. great job.
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Excellent
This is a vey amazing poem.It moves me how you use your words just exquiste. You should win this conest hands down. Very Very good poem Joey -
WHOA! This story is breathtaking. AIDS is a very popular virus and ruins many people lives, whether they know they're getting it or not. It's a sad time in someone's life to watch such a suffering. It's almost as if you feel the suffering yourself as I did in your story. Very well written. Fatality is write, One will never stop loving a true love through anything, which I think is exactly what you and him have.
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I loved this story, stunning very true . Love will not cease even through dark and sad times. Good luck on the contest.
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