Cold as You

You have a way of coming easily to me,1

And when you take you take the very best of me,2

So I start a fight cause i need to feel something,3

And you do what you want because I'm not what you wanted.4

"Amelia come here." rang out the voice of my boyfriend and lover Severus Snape.5

"Yes my prince," i said softly.6

"i'm going out tonight, so cover for me." he told me nonchalantly then gave me a soft kiss.7

There was no love, no passion behind it but kissing him melted me. I hoped that if I gave all my love and being to this man, maybe one day he would love me back someday.8

"You're going to see Voldermort aren't you" I asked forelornly9

"Yes" he simply replied.10

"Don't Severus. He will only get you killed." i begged gripping his arm.11

"Who are you to argue with me" he snapped.12

"I'm your bloody girlfriend you arse. Just because I'm not Lily doesn't mean i can't care about your well being." i cried.13

"never mention her. How many times must i tell you that. You are the one who insists on this pitiful relationship, even knowing I don't want you. I don't love you." he yelled pushing me from him.14

Oh what a shame15

What a rainy ending given to a perfect day16

Just walk away17

Ain't no use defending words that you will never say18

And now that I'm sitting here thinking it through19

I've never been anywhere cold as you20

Severus left yet again. He left me sitting here crying. I loved severus more then life itself but he hated our relationship. Hated it becuase i was not his precious Lily...It was times like these i hated my best friend..that sounds stupid but it's true.21

i thought today was going to be a good day. I was going to tell him that finally he would have the son he wanted and maybe just maybe that would make up for Harry the son that could have been his. After dinner tonight i was going to tell him in les then 7 months he was to be a father.22

~Later that night~23

I was laying in our bed hugging the pillow severus slept on needing his scent to fall asleep.24

"Amelia honey," Severus whispered stroking my face. "I'm sorry for yelling at you" he whispered.25

"I understand. I love you" i whispered through my tears.26

You put up walls and paint them all a shade of gray,27

And i stood here loving you and wish them all away,28

You come away with a great little story 29

Of a mess of a dreamer with the nerve to adore you30

"I love you." i told Severus softly.31

"I know" he simply replied32

He seemed so panicked as of late. He started talking to Professor Dumbledore though which had to be much better.33

"Severus when i give birth I'm leaving here" I told him.34

Oh what a shame35

What a rainy ending given to a perfect day36

Just walk away37

Ain't no use defending words that you will never say38

Now that I'm sitting here thinking it through39

I've never been anywhere cold as you40

"How can you think about leaving me" he asked coldly.41

"You don't love me. You never have. I can't keep living like this. Now you won't have to pretend to care what the devil happens to me...I just need to know which shall keep the child" i told him.42

"I will my son is mine not yours if you care so little about him but...he does need a mother."he told me coldly.43

"Then get Lily to help you...You'll get closer to the woman you love." I snapped.44

You never did give a damn thing honey45

But i cried, cried for you46

And i know you wouldnt have told nobody47

If I died, died for you48

Each day i cried for the man i would always love and the child i believed i would never see. i couldn't stand it but i couldn't go to see them without falling further into a depression.49

the years passed slowly and i got a job in Hogwarts as assistant to Poppy. the year was 1994 and my son Steven was in his third year. Each day injuries got worse especially due to the triwizard tournament and i had a bad feeling something would happen this year.50

The final event came and when i saw Harry come back with Cedric Diggory's dead body in his hands i knew Harry was teling the truth about Voldermort being back. I saw Severus start to leave I knew he was a spy but leaving so late would surely tip Voldermort off to something and surely Voldermort would kill him.51

"Severus you can't go. What if he kills you. What will happen to Steven." i begged.52

"I have to Amelia if i don't he will kill Steven, you, and I" he told me.53

"Then I am coming."54

"fine i dont have time to argue with you." he snapped55

we went out to the gate then aparated to a graveyard. i shivered as i saw the figure of voldermort looming nearby56

"Severus you dare show yourself late" he hissed in his chillingly cold voice.57

"i am sorry my lord." he said kneeling58

"Give me one good reason why i should not kill you." he hissed.59

Voldermort pulled his wand out and preformed the infamous killing curse on him but before it made contact i pushed severus out of the way being hit with it instead of him60

No one ever knew i died of my own will to save Severus.61

Author notes

why is the sky blue why cant it be green?

oh i hop it was fine that i used a songfic type fanfic it was my least dirty one that i love even though the real ending is a bit forced...i say this is why snape didnt die wen he returned i say he had a girlfriend he kept hidden and a son in the school do not tell me otherwise...srry im strange lol i hope everyone likes it this is a romantical sad story (i put this because the recent contest i put it in asks me to)

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  • moonwriter
    June 14, 2008

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    You need work on punctuation, capitalization, and grammar. The stroy was good, but it needed more descriptions. I found myself not caring what happened to the lovers. I was fascinated, but not emotionally into it. What it needs is description to make us fall in love at the good points and want to cry at the bad. It needs an emotional depth that it didn't have. I think if you edit this story and add details and emotion, it will be much better.

    This was still a really good story though. Good job!

  • sugarrrainbow
    June 1, 2008

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    This was really cool, I liked it.
    The punctuation did need work however and capitalization. But very cool idea.
    Good job and good luck (in both contests!)


  • NightTime-Fox
    May 25, 2008

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    It is a good piece, i am trying to find out if the content really matches up with the contest though. But over all a good piece and well written


  • Jenni-Wren
    April 14, 2008

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    I quite enjoyed this piece. I liked the way you split the song up and put it into the story, I don't think I have seen that done before. You showed alot of emotion. Well done!
    And thanks for entering the contest.


  • Natalie-
    April 13, 2008
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    Cool story but your punctuation needs work. Good Luck.


  • RegalTheft
    March 30, 2008
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    Harry Potter, eh? Never been a big fan of that boy. Too much tongue-twisting spells and broomsticks and the like. Nonetheless, good job, you have a definite grip of what a story should include. I liked the way you blended a poem into that too, very enticing. Hope you continue to please.

    --RT


  • Cari Cullen
    March 24, 2008

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    This was very good maybe their sld have been a heart acheing part but anyway I loved it very good Harry loves you, becuase you will do ^^


  • SayNope2Dopex14
    January 20, 2008
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    Aw the very first Harry Potter Fanfic. I must say I was a little confused at first with the lyrics. Maybe you should put them in quotes or something. It's really good. Extra brownie points for HP. I was never much of a fan of Snape since he gave Harry such a hard time and the fact I really <3 James and Lily but you did really good. I would've liked to know more back ground on Amelia and Steven use the rest of those words people! I gave a larger limit so I could see details and background. It was good. Really good. I hope to read more by you..

    Peace,
    Natalie

    • hajisbestgirl
      January 20, 2008
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      thanks natalie if its any consolation i didnt put much about steven because he was going to be in my version of HP and i havent as of yet decided much about him other then he looks exactly like Snape and he has a humongous crush on lucy (who you will know who it is sooner or later) i hated snape until like the fourth or fifth book then hated him for a year after the sixth and now i love him after reading the seventh and i blame sirius for the way he turned out...well all the maruaders but especially sirius and partially lily but thats for a whole other reason lol...if you ever wanna talk about HP just message me..that goes for anyone i love talking about it

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