I Am

I Am1

The sunrise
of the early morning.2

The sound of the ocean
on a nice, sunny day.3

The pitter patter
of the rain against your windowsill.4

The loveable kitten
that snuggles beside you on the cold winter nights.5

The innocent kiss
of a young pair of lovers.6

The tropical breeze
that lightly brushes against your cheek.7

The sweetness of cotton candy
melting against your tongue.8

The softness of a snowflake
floating gently to the ground.9

I Am10

The loving creature
of your ironic nightmare

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  • perfect paradox
    June 4, 2008

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    Really great! I love how you described everything!

    My only major problem was that all of the I Ams were seemingly perfect. No one is perfect so I think you should sneak in a bad about yourself in there. Just my opinion.

    A wonderful write! Keep it up!

    -CC


  • alreadyloveuforever
    March 12, 2008
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    its good, i like it


  • Spiffy Ree
    January 19, 2008
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    That's really good. I've never read that one I don't think. It's good.


    • Seria
      January 19, 2008
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      Thanks! ^-^ Nope, it's new, fresh from the creative writing class oven.

  • DeuceIzWild
    January 18, 2008

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    good

    Kindof a surprise ending there... Overall, I like it, but on line 6 "a young pair of lovers"... For MY personal taste, I'd rather see it as "a pair of young lovers", but it's your poem, and your choice. Well written...

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