Ozark Deliverance

Another three hundred sixty five Wrangler-clad days behind him, Billy scurries up the west side of the tallest hill overlooking his ruddy Oklahoma town - forgotten, save for a rusty Route 66 sign which austerely grins through buckshot dimples,1

Degalvyi
population: 562

The town's name is mispronounced, if ever mentioned outside the ranching community of eight country homes, three barns and Pa's gas station from which forty miles of pasture cling tirelessly to the shoulders of the highway in either direction. Billy's world is tough, but his aspirations unconquerable, as he seeks to capture the first sunrise of the year. 3

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Author notes

this is a hundred word story i had to write for my creative writing class.

"degalvyi" is Cherokee for "sunrise," and is pronounced "day-guh-luh-yee." http://wehali.com/tsalagi/index.cfm?event=showDict

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