You’re a spitting image of a bump on a log. You laze around and pull a trick out of your sleeve to make me snug as a bug to breathe around you. It’s a sigh of relief when you sleep like a log and I stare at you. No love’s lost, because silence is golden. You may be older and wise but I’m young and learning. You are the head honcho on where to go. You’re sense of direction is out of sight. I catch you red-handed when you look at me, you creature of comfort. I was something the cat dragged in because I barked up some wrong trees, a stick in the mud I was. Two peas in a pod like stuff dreams are made of.1
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creative writing assignment to get all cliches out of our system
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cool yeah it did seem more to be a prose than a story to me well that may just be the way i read it great write though its the most original unoriginal thing i have read it kinda reminds me of that old cartoon..i dont know what it was called but it had the recurring joke of"cat got your toungue" and then a cat comes out of no where with a toungue in his hand and all the weird little sayings were taken seriosuly ok thats enough about the cartoon great write keep up the good words
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maybe if you describe your stuff as prose and put it in the poetry section you will get more comments and it does remind me of some peoples prose on here rather than a story. Quite often people wont read stories as they think that they are going to be too long ..anyway just a thought
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my mascara looks just like this today...i am thinking of starting a campaign for the abolition of mascara...pity it isnt lethal..... i am just being silly. got to say that I love this and you are very clever to think of it.wish i had. love those cliches and they made sense. just think of talking in cliches and never having to think of anything original to say. Actually i was just disgussing this with someone i have know for 30 years approx and saying how we still come up with new things to say but that really most of what we say to each other is just repetition and we have heard it all before....the quest for something new or am i barking mad and out of my tree ooh how easy and simple it is to just repeat and be a parrt. have you noticed how most pop songs do it continually but there is one that stiks in my mind as so unusual and good and that was the one with the line guilty feet aint got no rythm people seemd to really take to that cos of the lyrics i think...blah blah ramble ramble....
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