I wish there were a greater word for love so I could vividly describe my passion for some things. So maybe there might be some way for people to understand what I do. Is love really love, can we go beyond love? If we can, can we go beyond again? Did people ever think William Shakespeare and Edgar Alan Poe were crazy or weird? This is the one thing I wish we could learn from the past. Weird people turn out in our wildest memories. You remember the weirdoes. So why are they/we still made fun of and questions? Why? I got mesmerized by your marble eyes.1
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okay i realize this is crappy lol or atleast i think so but just think...
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lol thanks
thanks onerios its my favorite line too this was just simply "I wish there were a greater word for love so I could vividly describe how i love you...i get mesmerized by your marble eyes" and i just needed something for CAIII and so i just filled it in -
Why? I got mesmerized by your marble eyes.
I really liked this line. Had such deep layers rolling around in my mind...lol. The rest of the piece was also very entertaining...although a bit scattered. Felt more like a stream of conscious poem than a stylized or structured one. In any case, I thought it held a lot of promise, and with some time and patience in the revising room, lol, should be a real winner!
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