A ten-year-old Willow giggled as she ran through the meadow. The young kitsune girl kept giggling the whole way home, carrying flowers she'd picked.1
Only one sight stopped her laughing.2
She stopped running and stared, the flowers falling to the dirt.3
"Fire," she whispered.4
Her home and the entire town was burning.5
She shrieked and ran towards her home. Opening the door, she ran in to look for her family, ignoring the heat. Finding no one, she went back out with only the ends of her hair singed.6
A scream rang through the air, freezing Willow in her tracks. She looked towards the center of town where the sound had come from. She began to run again, towards the place.7
She was horrified at the sight.8
An enemy ninja, unidentified as he wore no headband, was holding her mother up by the hair, but what scared her the most, was the fact that his sword was in the middle of her mother's body.9
He pulled the sword out and let the woman fall to the ground unceremoniously, unaware of the young girl in the shadows.10
Still breathing heavily from running, Willow stared. Her father and siblings were also there, face down in the dirt.11
She screamed in rage causing the ninja to turn towards her.12
Her fangs grew longer and her tail split into three. Her red chakra swirled around her and her eyes glowed red menacingly.13
Frightened by her demonic appearance, the ninja turned and ran by instinct.14
Willow gave chase after her "prey."15
He ran into one of the few buildings that were not on fire in an attempt to slow her down.16
Willow slammed into the door, growling when it wouldn't budge as the ninja had taken the time it took for her to get there to push something against it. Willow knew she couldn't move it, even through her rage. She walked around to the back leaving a shadow clone of herself pounding at the front door.17
Entering the house, she found the ninja had gone up the stairs. Her fiery aura burned the carpet under her feet as she ascended.18
Finding the room he was in, she opened the door easily and tore her claws and fangs into the man.19
She suddenly stopped, giggling hysterically.20
The man had been screaming previously, and was now gasping in pain.21
"The only good thing about you..." she said sadistically.22
Through his pain, the ninja felt confusion.23
Willow looked at him with slitted red eyes and grinned. She raised a claw to kill him and said, "You have such pretty blood."
Author notes
Author's Note: Um, well, I'm not usually this morbid, but I was listening to "Bleed It Out" by Linkin Park, which inspired me to write this(I love Linkin Park btw). Otherwise, I have no explanation for this other than I was feeling particularly blood thirsty.
Tell me what you think and what should be fixed and why.
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>O.O< OMG! *shudder* Remind me never to piss you off too bad...You really like blood huh?
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Muahaha! jk, jk. XD
Maybe I just shouldn't listen to Linkin Park when I'm in the mood to write. lol.
Blood is rather pretty though. Don't you agree, 'nee-chan?
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I was like, "Omg, Willow wrote something--Must read--Now!" Lol.
I love it. It fits her well. I laughed at the last part. Looks like sissy has a breaking point too, eh?
Nice inspiration btw.
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XD lol..
It does, doesn't it.. I must not have told you, but that's the real Willow. She's happy most of the time because she lost her memory. |D -
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Wow. I'm in the process of writing a story that portrays the real Hato too. I just dunno where to go with it yet.
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Haha, what a coincidence.
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wow, very good. I am not usually one for action-like pieces but this was indeed really interesting and kept my attention the entire time.
I didn't really find any errors... overall it was pretty decent. In fact I would say probably the best fantasy action thriller piece I have read.
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Thank you very much! As I was typing it on here, I was like... "This doesn't sound very well written anymore... TT-TT" But I typed it anyway. I'm glad you liked it! =^-^=
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