unforgivable sin.

Silently still, 1

Rationally hot, 2

Goose bump filled chill,3

Body’s to rot. 4

Held against will,5

Crying? I try not, 6

Soundlessly kill,7

In the act I am caught, 8

Hands shake in fear,9

Eyes wide with shock,10

My point is now near,11

And I cannot stop.12

Those words you did hear,13

You cried and you fought,14

Your words I didn’t hear,15

Your life, now you sought. 16

Your spirit set free,17

Its all my fault, 18

All you can see,19

Is heavens assault.20

What did I do?21

Blood stained hands,22

I just have no clue,23

I must escape with my only chance.24

Finger tips hot.25

Hands cold.26

Eyes wide.27

Bloody floor.28

Rotting body.29

Alive I am.30

But no, your not. 31

I have committed a sin. 32

Murder.

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  • Midnightmare
    January 14, 2008

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    well it certainly was abstract in a way, yet this is a good thing. I liked the rhyming at the beginning, although it seemed to get less effective and less smooth towards the end.
    I found a couple of errors in spelling and punctuation.
    line 18- "Its" should be "It's" because it is actually "It is" so it needs the apostrophe.
    There was another one I found somewhere in there but I cannot find it now that I need to! haha.
    Well I thought that this was really personal in a way and very sad as well.
    Good job, and keep up the good work! An enjoyable read, indeed.