There's holes in my socks, tears in my jeans,
You can see my unclean feet, my bruised knees,
There's stains on my shirt, mud on my shoes,
A heart broken and a baby due.
In your eyes am I unclassy?
Unsophisticated, wierd, and nasty?
Do you look in the mirror and wonder if I care?
You're a housecat while I'm a wild bear.
Does it ever enter your mind,
How I refuse to walk the line?
Take your caviar and shove it up your *bunny*,
But don't you forget this crazy lass. 1
Author notes
I honestly don't know where this came from...I just let my pencil on the page and my thoughts down through it. Any comments?
A contest entry
- Another Poetry Contest by Melissa Loves Jeffy.
500 points, ended February 21, 2008, 16 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
LOL, wha' you thinkin?
Comments
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This is a really amazing poem. I love the idea of a rick and pour romance. A clasic idea that never gets old. Great job. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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GAWD!!!!!!pt. 2
Once again...awesome. Very very nice. I love the whole nonconformist/angry at the rich world attitude the chick has in here. Bravaaaaaa!!!! *Chases butterfly to next read*
|x|Mel|x|
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Wow, tht was really great.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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I think it had a deep meaning but it sucked just kidding.
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Wow!Lol. This is weird but i think you are trying to say that just because of the way you dress doesnt mean that you act the same way or think the same way? Idk.
Good job!
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wow, this is really good. I like the first four lines ALOT, i find them the best. Your a great writter.
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Spunk.
Wonderful little poem. I liked how you compared the bear and the cat. Interesting contrast.
" If you don't like the way I look, don't look."- comes into my mind as I read this.
Lovely job.
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A heart broken and a baby due.
In your eyes am I unclassy?
Unsophisticated, wierd, and nasty?
I love these line's...
hehe all except having a baby due I can relate to....o.o
hehe made me laugh but in a good way
cheers caviar ..
~blair~
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once again, you blow my mind steph! man oh man, can you really get into peoples heads. its true though, that is how you feel when looked down upon.
i admire your ability to see through others eyes!
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I love it, it made me think of some people i know. A short, to the point, and interesting peom. Good write.
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I like it :3
It sounds like some one speaking up for themselves, after living a life of being looked down upon. -
Way to speak out. Kind of odd, but short, sweet and to the point. Great job.
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comments? I have one. or two or three or four.
I liked this a lot. flow was superb, rhythm flawless and topic interesting.
I agree, this definitely reminded me of myself... seeing as I don't really conform to how everyone wants me to.
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i love it!!
haha i never follow the mainstream, it reminded me of myself
oh and i love ht whole
"Take your caviar and shove it up your *bunny*"
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I like the bunny part lol
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oh, wow
i liked this ^_^
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