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Ayah 3
Ayah a beautiful Afghani girl, who was in her neighbour's house 4
playing with children, when she heard a loud explosion!!.5
children ran frightened 6
Looking at her old poor mud- house 7
she found nothing,8
Except rubble!9
She ran away terrified shocked, when she saw all her seven brothers and sisters , under the rubble, her mum too.,she have never seen her father , , and every time she asked about him,she heard one word , your dad is in war 10
Terrified, she ran and ran then she suddenly11
collapsed.12
A man saw her laying on the floor, he put her on his donkey ,and 13
took her to the nearest hospital.14
the nurse found a deep cut wound on her face that was bleeding profusely15
when the Doctor from( Red Cross ) saw her, he shouted 16
GOD PLEASE HELP HER ,she is so beautiful 17
, he was amazed ,as she looked like his youngest daughter Maria ! Whom, he missed so much 18
it took him ages to suture neatly her all wounds of the beautiful girl 19
all the time he kept asking himself , God: 20
why should these children suffer so much?21
But never had an answer!!!22
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Ayah, was still drowsy, he held her in his arms 24
as she was still screaming hysterically ,25
he hugged her, kissed her face several times26
feeling his warm embrace, 27
still drowsy form anaesthesia 28
she asked him innocently ,29
are you papa??30
he replied 31
yes yes ,my dear 32
his tears was now falling rivers ,33
holding her close to his heart 34
he told her please stop crying now35
we are going home now36
Ayah my daughter ! 37
Aya a small child from Afganestan 38
Ricardo a doctor from the Red cross 39
Maria: the doctor youngest daughter 40
What did you think? Please comment!
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Is this a poem or a story? If it's a story why's it in poem layout, if it's a poem why's it not on AP?
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You have painted a picture in my mind of these childern of war as I read your words...very well done...I enjoyed the read..thank you for sharing
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THANKS zestychick8
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excellent
I love this poem.Its really nice!
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gerry i cryed while writing it and tears kept fallig till now
when i watch arabic T.V CHANELLS WHERE they do ot hide pictures from us -
Mona, the last few lines gave me chills. Leaders war and people suffer. Maybe it's time for the Women to be the leaders.
I read this poem how you would have spoken it.. it works.
I can feel Your pain when you wrote this.
gerry
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thank you maria
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Hello Mona
Thanks for a wonderful read. And you are right..seeing children suffer does make me cry. I like writing prose type poems myself, but one thing for sure...the line breaks are difficult to choose.
Also, it is necessary to use punctuation to make the read smoother. So you would have to add some commas and full stops here and there, and choose your line breaks trying follow the natural rhythm of speech.
This poem reminds me of a film I saw some time ago.
Most inspiring.
Maria -
sorry if i make you cry from harsh reality
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