The Magic of your touch

I'm a little drunk1

your hands reach around2

my crouched shoulder3

in a gesture of civility,4

this is sufficient5

I wouldn't dream of tearing away6

from your cradled arm.7

Your mouth breathes brief words8

into my skin9

alienating all that surrounds us.10

Yes, you are nearer11

your lips fall 12

between the gap of my teeth13

it's hard to speak14

my lips reach a little below15

to inhale the linguistic tongue.16

I know i know17

that fast scares you,18

you hold my hand onto19

the hidden joy erupting there20

in circular movement 21

and linear draws22

you keep me there.23

Oh lord what music 24

it makes,25

Nothing but nothing 26

makes me quiver and melt27

then the holy weapon 28

you're keeping at bay.29

What did you think? Please comment!

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    : Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have 0. (?) (Line numbers)
    Ratings:

Comments

1 - 6 of 6

  • papercutsagain
    November 19, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    wow this was amazing. It captured "erotica" in the best poetic form possible. It was sweet and soft, omg orgasmic!! great job your making me want you! lol great work

    xox rach

  • Luscious
    November 11, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    This was very nicely written although it makes my erotic seem like hard core porn!!! hehehehe

  • cake
    November 7, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    Thank you it was fun. cake

  • BehindTheEyes
    November 6, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    Good job. A picture was set into my mind and I think this is really good. Thanks so much for entering. Good luck

  • macandrew
    November 3, 2004
    Edit | Reply

    very good

    Very beautifully written. This was very easy to picture in my mind, a sign of a good writer.

    Nicely done.
    John


  • November 3, 2004
    Edit | Reply
    hehehe i have never heard it called a holy weapon before. that's a new way to describe it for sure. i like this.

1 - 6 of 6