It had gotten so bad, he had just burst out the door and ran.1
He had run past the marina, past Mr. Tell's yacht, past his own Donzi, past his rather confused car.2
He had run down the shore to the public boardwalk, shoving past tourists and fishermen.3
He had run to the edge of the pier and slid to a halt at the last second, chest heaving, mind racing, watching a left-behind mussel shell tumble down the endless climb to the ocean, landing in the murky green waves with a sickeningly distant splash.4
It scared him that the thought of suicide had even crossed his mind.5
Now he lay in the cool sand, dirty blonde hair tousled by the salty sea breeze, looking up at the constellations above him. He had already found Ursa Minor, Ursa Major, and the Little Dipper; now he was searching for the Big Dipper. It wasn't a hobby of his, but it kept his mind off everything.6
"What are you doing out this late, boy?" someone asked from the street.7
Alec stood and brushed the sand from his black T-shirt and blue jeans, but before he could answer, Karr was already over the curb and quickly driving over to the officer.8
"He's with me," the AI answered, driving up beside his partner.9
The officer gave the car a questioning look. "Devon Miles chose Alecsandor McKurra to be your driver?"10
Karr growled. "You are no longer needed, Officer Ramone."11
The officer strode off, leaving Karr and Alec alone.12
"Alec, why did you just take off?"13
Alec sighed and stepped into the metallic black '07 Charger, which was in as good condition as it was in its early days. "I don't know. I guess it all just caught up to me."14
"Well...come back to the Foundation and get some rest, okay? I'm sure you'll feel better after a good twelve hours."15
"Six."16
"Ten."17
"Eight and I'll do it."18
"Sounds good to me," Karr said with a chuckle. He knew Alec would probably take the opportunity to sleep in anyway.
Author notes
Banana muffins DOMINATE. Option #5 was used as a starter sentence.
A contest entry
- Use this sentence! by StarIlluminated.
600 points, ended January 19, 2008, 4 entries
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Comments
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I. Am. Officially. In. Love. With. This.
This was written so well...and I love it!
I love the plot, too. It's an awesome beginning!
Definitely
I can't wait to read more of yours!
Right now I have to comment on a few of my contest entries, then I'm leaving for the day. But I'll definitely come back!
This was really great, though. I love it! Almost as much as the real thing
Great read!
xoxo
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Tay
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This was soo awesome! I love all of the detail you put into this! You did a good job incorperating the sentence into your story, it really worked out!
One part I got confused at was:
Alec stood and brushed the sand from his black T-shirt and blue jeans, but before he could answer, Karr was already over the curb and quickly driving over to the officer.8
"He's with me," the AI answered, driving up beside his partner.9
The officer gave the car a questioning look. "Devon Miles chose Alecsandor McKurra to be your driver?"
Is The Al supposed to be Alec? And his last name is McKurra and his partner is Karr? That took me a while to figure out.
But other than that, great story. This is really nice and you should expand it!
Illuminated
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Karr was the AI, which was installed in the car, therefore making Karr the car. Alec was his human driver who was chosen to be his partner, the one who burst out the door and ran.
And I think it will go somewhere... *smirks*
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