The lost land of Dargergin

The twin empresses sat proud and dignified on their thrones .They had  on dark blue dresses and their dark hair was pinned up in coils and curls.Margert felt the hush of the crowed as she entered the room with chains clasped onto her arms. The crew fallowed behind her all sulking as they walked to the foot of the empresses. Abraham's peg-leg tapped loudly on the marble floor.Women in large dress and makeup caked faces looked at them from behind fans.The guards forced Margert to her knees then Abraham and Jacob next to her. "Abraham you are charged with harboring of a criminal"said Nema as she and her sister rose to their feet "as is your son and you human girl are charged with defying our law by not returning the countries possession" added Anema stepping down in front of Margert. She and her sister looked older and more posed then their age of thirteen."you Abraham with the order of the council are banished to Fools Island on opposite side of the the storm wall as is your son" Anema said Nema knelt down in front of Margert "and you girl you because of your foolishness shall never return to earth". Margert looked deep in Nema's eyes. She the sorrow and pain this child had gone through in her thirteen years of age banishing people children mothers fathers and kin to places she would never dare enter.Now in her thirteenth year she kept and almost innocent person from returning to her home."milady i can't possibly say that i wished to return i request that you allow me to speak to my mother and allow me to say of what pointless reason i may not return home then you may punish me in whatever way you wish". The empress stood up her pale face was still but her eyes showed sadness."for your bravery in diffing me my sister my guards and my country i shall grant you a one moon return to your home if my sister agrees" she looked at Anema who stood proud not to far behind her sister "so be it" she said. They in  returned to their seats and in unison then Nema said "we are not weak but we are not barbaric so i  grant this wish, dismissed". They rose and excited across the room.

Author notes

i've wrote several different parts to this story this is just something i thought up really fast

A contest entry

just part of a story i wrote hope ya like

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  • blindmouse2
    January 6, 2008
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    I like it

    I think i will like this one more. No offense to your other one but i think i will like this more.


  • Rose B Gray
    January 6, 2008

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    hmmmm... This shows a lot of promise. I want to read more soon! This place sounds really interesting. I did see a few mispelled words though. Just one or two. No big deal. Other then that no real flaw that I can see. Keep writing!