nightmares

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the wind crawls up you back like spiders spreading web2

or the stench of the dead rolling around the night floor3

for the wolves are snapping their mouths so tight they could eat 4

your hand in one slice bite5

as I walk further to see how much terrors that seek ahead 6

I hear the scream of more dieing children with the insistence7

now stood Brocken8

for the man in the dark night looks like he seeks one more as i9

scream like much times before10

I new i could not take one more so i sliced his leg for me to run11

but he had me by a gun so threw my self down to fell the force 12

of the small rock like pound13

but before he pulled the trigger i found out i was so much 14

quicker so I turned the gun at the old man and their was peace 15

threw out my hand16

as the cops came to get me put me away forget it so i shot them 17

with the gun I had in my hand 18

but when i woke up the next day i had fears that wont ever go 19

away in this room of padded walls every fear that was thought 20

echoed threw the square blocks21

every person has a nightmare problem make one part real she22

thought she broke the glass with the only window she had and when23

food comes their i will pay back.

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  • UnEdibleChick
    March 15, 2008

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    This needs revising. This is pretty good though. Thanks for entering and good luck. Keep the great work up.


  • Xtclozer-
    March 7, 2008

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    lol. I already read and commented on this taylor. But, good job, I will say that again .
    Thanks for entering.


  • LadyLionnir
    January 28, 2008

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    I think it's a great poem, it would be an even greater story-in my opinion. The description would leave a reader awe-struck. Keep up the poetry, though.


  • Kyoshoro Wolf
    January 19, 2008
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    I really like this poem.Great job

  • Xtclozer-
    January 5, 2008
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    Taylor you know i love this poem Especially the begining. I hope you get some more comments soon, and make another poem later.

    Robin.

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