Sasuke woke up and said to himself "what have I done I've been an outcast for 10 years now I need to find a way to redeem myself to Konha and not get my self killed but the again naruto to is looking for me I might as well give up right here right now but.... I.....". Then Sasuke heard a familiar voice "SASUKE!!!" It was Naruto Sasuke thought to himself "well this is it i have to die before I hurt my only friends" sasuke thought It would be a good idea to let Narutoknow where he was so he would get him self killed . Sasuke yelled out "NARUTO I'M HERE!!!". Naruto heard the yell and being the person he was he rushed over to Sasuke and said "why did you call me over to die Sasuke". sasuke said "No... I called to you to ask... for forgiveness". The anger in Narutos eyes disappered and saddness apearred in its place naruto said "Sasuke why do you....why do you ask for forgivness after what you but the squad through we tryed to help you come to your senses but you ignored us and since you are my freind... i forgivie you Sasuke".Sasuke said in happiness "thank you naruto but what about the village would they let me come back". naruto said "they will come on lets go everyone wants to see you once more". then some enemey ninjas surronded them Sasuke said "Hey naruto remeber when we fought side by side" naruto replied "yeah I remeber Sasuke well wanna throw the the first punch". "sure" Sasuke replied the ninjas jumped at them Naruto and Sasuke stood their ground and then jumped at the enemy ninja.1
to be continued untill then cya 2
if i submitted twice sorry
A contest entry
- Naruto Fanfictions by Kyoshoro Wolf.
135 points, ended January 18, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
if u have any ideas let me know oh and give me some more ideas and just post watever u want and dont ask me to kill off the heros ok i will just ignore you if u do
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well part 2 wont be out for a while ive got no ideas for it
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it could go somewhere.
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There is a bunch of mistakes.You should revise it before you put it on story write.This Naruto fanfiction can get better through time.I could give you some pointers if you need help or some ideas.
Advice:Seperate your stories into paragraphs and use spellcheck.Right now your story is all jumbled up and there are mispelled words and that scares off the readers.
Also you should join my group Lost Village of the Snow if you already have not.
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thanks for the advice what does an hounrable mention do any way
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im only new to this kinda
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i know i suck at this but plz give my a break
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