A Terrible Night

"I cant believe I'm actually here." I looked around me, I was alone. It had been a long, hard, scary night. 1

"Alive." I whispered, the word left a nasty taste in my mouth. I shivered. Alive. It kept repeating over and over in my mind. I wasn't supposed to be alive. I heard sirens and jumped. It felt like my heart was in my throat. It was the cops. I felt my blood boil and my anger rise. They should have been here hours ago. If they came sooner my friend's would still be alive. 2

"My friend's," I mumbled, then turned around. The house, the house is where it all happened. Just looking at it had given me the creeps. I should have never gone inside in the first place. But I did, and now my best friend's are gone, dead, and I'm the only one left. The sirens gradually got closer. There were red and blue blinking lights all around me, as I looked closer I saw an ambulance and several cop cars. 3

"There is no use for an ambulance." They pulled up right in front of me. A cop got out of one of the cars, he was big, with chubby hands and shifty, beady eyes he Started to walk towards me, "Ma'am?" I didn't answer, just stared from the shock, 4

"Are you okay?" 5

"I guess." I turned back around to stare at the house, not sure what I was trying to look at. All of a sudden I felt a hand on my shoulder, I swung around and punched him. Thats when I realized that it was just the dumb cop. 6

"Sorry," I mumbled. But then I couldn't help but smile a little bit when I realized his nose was bleeding. He touched his nose and looked down at the blood on his fingers. 7

"You have quite a punch there little lady." I frowned, that is the word I despised most, little lady.
"Don't call me that again."
"Sorry little lady." I glared, I already hated him.
"My name is not little lady, it's Mary."
"OK little lady." I rolled my eyes and gritted my teeth holding back another punch. 8

"Why don't we take you to the ambulance to get you looked at, then you can explain to me what happened here."
I grimly followed him to the ambulance.
After I was looked at I was put in to the police car and went down to the police station. I looked back one more time and thought I saw someone come out of the house.  My face went pale,"Stop it Mary." I scolded.
"What did you say?" I shook my head. 9

"Nothing." I looked back and he was gone.
When we got to the police station it was five'clock in the morning. He took me to the interrogation room.
"Want something to eat?"
"Sure."
When he left another police officer came in to the room with a doughnut in his hand. He too was chubby, but had wide sky blue eyes.
"So, you want to tell me what happened?"
"Maybe." I glared at him and narrowed my eyes.
He looked at me.10

"Okay lets start with the basics." He shoved the rest of the doughnut into his mouth.
"Tell me your name." He smacked his lips, I cringed with disgust.
"You already know my name," I grumbled,
"besides your just a fat, stupid cop any way." I said under my breath. He gave me an irritated sigh,
"Now are you ready to tell me what had happened?"
"Sure whatever." I took a deep breath and sighed.
"It all started with a simple phone call..."
"Mom! where are you?"
"Here!" Came the muffled reply.
"I'll save you! just hold on!"
"Mary! Hurry!"
A few seconds later I heard a scream and then a gunshot.........
I gasped and woke up drenched in sweat. I had the same dream every night. I looked at the clock it was two' o clock in the morning. I sighed and laid back on my pillow. I was just about to fall back sleep when the phone rang. I practically jumped out of my skin. I picked up the phone.
"Hello?"
"Hi is Mary there?"
"This is her."
"Good, i want you to come over, we're having a party!"
"At two in the morning?"
"Actually its two in the after noon!"
I looked outside, the sun was high up in the sky, I sighed.
"Okay, whats the address?"
After writing the address down I got up and got dressed. Then went downstairs and found my mother in the kitchen. She looked up from the counter. 11

"Well good morning sleepy head!"
I smiled, "Can you take me to a party?"
She cocked her head to the side, "When?"
"Now?" She frowned and looked me up and down.
"Are'nt you going to eat?"
"No." She gave me her famous upset look, I tried not to laugh.
We got into the car and she took me to the house.
When we pulled up I saw no movement. I looked over at my mom and saw that she noticed the same thing. I thought that maybe I was the first person to get there. 12

So I got out of the car, but as I listened I heard no music coming from the house. I should have heard something the house had to of been at least four stories high. I looked back to my mom and gave her a reassuring smile. She smiled back but I could still tell that she wasn't too sure about this.
So I slowly walked up the front steps to the front door. My mother pulled out and waved as she drove off.
I raised my hand to knock on the door, my hand was shaking, I knocked on the door.
but no one answered so I knocked again and the door seemed to open by itself. I looked around then went inside.
"Hello?" I listened to my voice as it echoed off of the walls.
"Any one home?" As I looked up I saw a spiral staircase, and some furniture. It was unusually dusty.
"Hi there!" I jumped and looked up.
"Janie?"
"Hello Mary how are you?"
"What are you doing here?"
"Its weird I got a call telling me to come over."
"So is anyone else here?"
"Yes, actually, all of our friend's are here and they all got the same phone call, anyways why don't you come up and join us?"
"Okay." As I walked up the stairs  I saw that the paint was chipping off the walls, and there was so much dust on the floor that it muffled my footsteps.
Janie led me to a door that was ajar and opened it, she looked back at me and smiled. I walked inside and hearda noise, I looked up and saw an axe headed right for me.
"Look out!" I heard Janie yell from behind me. I ducked just in time, except I heard a scream cut off short with a sickening thud. I was afraid to turn around but I did any way. She was lying on the floor covered in a pool of blood with an axe in her head.
I heard a voice that sounded like sand paper,"One down five to go."
I spun around but didnt see any one. I was so scared I couldn't move.
I heard a door open and saw my friend Dan come out of a door right across from the hall. "What the...." he looked down and saw Janie.
"Oh my god." he whispered.
I looked up at him, "Do you have a phone?"
He reached in to his pocket and pulled out his cell phone.
"Here." he tossed it to me. I dialed the emergency number.
"Hello? What is your emergency?"
I told her every thing that happened and she said help was on the way.
I turned around to give the phone back to Dan when I saw a man standing behind him.
"Dan! Watch out!" I screamed but it was too late, there was a knife in his back before he even knew what was going on. I turned and ran down the stairs, I tried to open up the front doors but they were stuck.
I heard the raspy voice once more, "Two down four to go."
I ran in to a different room and had a dozen knives fly at me. I barely escaped. I felt something wet drip down my forehead, I reached up and noticed one of the knives had cut me.
Just then I heard two more people scream at the same time. and heard that same creepy voice say,"Four down two to go."
I started crying, I had no where to go. I opened another door and crept in softly shutting it behind me. When I turned around there was a man standing there, smiling, and he had a knife in his hand. I couldnt breath. I stood there for the longest time and he didn't move.
Then I saw someone move out of the corner of my eye. There was a boy about my age looking at me.
"Its just a dummie." He said.
I looked at him confused, "What?"
The door opened, "Excuse me for inturrupting, but I have your food here."
The aroma made my mouth water. When he set the bowl down I looked up at him. "Thank you."
He nodded and turned around to walk out the door.
"Wait a second," He turned back around and looked at me, the smile still on his face.
"I know you," I said. I felt my face go pale.
"You were also in the house, you're the killer." The cop sitting from across from me looked shocked. He reached in to his coat and pulled out a gun. "I should have killed you when I had the chance."
He leveled the gun and pointed it at me. "Bye." his smile grew wider as he pulled the trigger.
I gasped and sat up in bed. I was breathing heavily and felt cold sweat running down my face. I thought my heart was going to pound out of my chest. I could still hear the gun echoing inside of my head, and felt my ears still ringing. The phone rang and I jummped. I looked over at the clock 2:00. I crawled out of bed and looked out the window, the sun was high in the sky.
"Unbeleivable." I whispered.
"Maybe its just coincidence." I picked up the phone. "Hello?"
"Hi is mary there? We're having a party."
I slammed the phone down. Sweat was pouring down my face.
"Oh my god, oh my god."
All the rest of the day I sat around the house never moving.
I went to bed that night trying not to worry. but I got woken up at two in the morning by the door bell, I opened the door and there was a cop standing in the door way, he took off his hat.
"Mary?" I shook my head yes, he looked down,
"You're freinds are dead. And we noticed there was a cell phone missing that some one tried calling from."
Just then I noticed there was something hard in my hand. When I opened it, I saw Dans cell phone.13

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  • ShadowQueen12
    January 14
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    I like this story; really gory and mysterious! It was great, but watch your spelling and grammar.

  • First off, the first paragraph could and probably should be broken down into smaller ones. For example, whenever there's a change in the dialogue you should start a new paragraph.

    Second point: spelling and grammar check. If you don't have a spellchecker on your computer, use a dictionary. As for grammar, don't use Microsoft Word's grammar check - check it yourself and make sure it makes sense.

    So far the story seems interesting, and I would like to figure out what's going on and al lthe other details left out thus far. Keep on writing.