First Date.... freezing in early December, his hand clasping mine.1
Young, 15, Waiting for a first kiss. Lips are numb, but his kiss melts me.2
The start of my life, a relationship. 3
First week.... never apart, drooling over one another in classes, counting seconds til we just get to hold each other. 4
First month.... love was amazing, love was him. So lucky that i had him, so afraid i would lose him.5
First year.... school was over, starting college, we had grown into one. Inseperable, 'young adults' as they say, making me whole each day spent with him.6
First fight.... said he would miss me if i went out for an hour, 'Your Crazy' i say. His eyes beaming at me, total silence for what seemed a lifetime. My eyes flutter, his hands are round my neck, breathing is the last thing in my head. He stops, I run, He leaves. 7
First Make-Up.... Flowers left at my door, apology accepted, 16 and silly, loving him too much8
First tears.... feeling alone, locked in his room, not letting me out. I sob for my mother. Tears soaken my clothes, confusion fills my heart.9
All because i was tired.10
First shame.... My fault he said, i said no, cried the whole way through it. It hurt, it hurt so bad, stareing at the ceiling, blocking it all out. The time passed, the pain stopped, rape over.11
First wake-up call.... trapped in a world where i dont breathe, i gasp for air. Facing demons, fighting back, finding myself.12
First break-up.... Tears cried by a broken man defeated. walking home in the pitch dark, walking free, walking away from this love. Scared, abused, surviving.13
First Life .... Strength that is unbreakable, dreams that are now reachable, loving myself in a way undescribable.He said i would amount to nothing, his words meaningless.14
Three years on.... College qualifications,University, my car, my own money,my personality, my job, my own mind,my freedom, my freinds, MY LIFE.15
Thankful for his words, his abuse, his love, for without it, i would be nothing.16
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Amazing!!!
Wow that was an amazing poem. I'm so sorry this happened to you. Is it all true? Good luck!!! -
WOW !! this is a good poem on how rape can effect certain people good lukc in my contest !
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AMAZING!!!!
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Its a true feeling & nice flow we can all relate
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Beautiful! Thank you so much for entering!
Love,
Katy
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wow, that is such a powerful piece. it's amazing that something so horrible didn't break you...it's awesome that you kept on living, when some people after such bad experiences blame themselves and refuse to go on. great job, keep writing...your obviously great at it!!
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Hey,
Very well written.. extremely powerful even though it's short, the format is unique, I like. In the 7th 'paragraph' I guess you could call it, stareing is staring. I'm not sure I totally agree with the end result, but that's entirely my own opinion. Nevertheless, it's very well written, congrats on a good piece.
Becca -
Hi. I don't mean to interfere, but had to because I have read all the poems in your contest, and this one really touched me.
It is very sad that you don't think this is what you are looking for in this contest, because for me it was extremely moving and seemed to fit the theme perfectly. Everyone's story is different. Maybe you are looking for 'your' story based on your preconceptions of what love is 'supposed' to be. -
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Interesting format... This is more like an author's page thing than a story. But that's ok.
I'm not sure if this is quite what I'm looking for for this contest... but i like the story, so don't take it out. I'm judging this on how much I like the story, not how relevant it is to what I want in the contest. -
I thought that was an awesome story. The way you wrote it was great individuality, and it made me keep reading. It was short, sweet, and to the point.
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this is nice. Thank you for telling me to read it. If you dont mind... check out my "with the light on" the contest version.. aight.. good job...
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i can totally relate to it as you could relate to mine.. "my biggest regret".. thank you for the comment and for sharing that with me..
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thats strong...like it
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Life is so full of surprises. A lot of what we go through as children and young adults we look back and realize that without a few of those things its possible we wouldnt be where we are and I think thats what youre trying to get through with your write here.
Sometimes life seems hard and theres always that easy way out but little do we know is that if we dont take it that were stronger than we thought we were.
I hope you understand what Im saying. I hope I havent confused you. I think your story is a bit choppy sort of like a short story and poem put together but overall the moral is one that a few people have experienced.
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thats a wickidly crazy story. ive never had a bond so powerful through love or hate or fear. the form of it wasnt to inticing howerver, and it seems to be a bare minimum of a larger more powerful tale. you should go into more depth in the begining over the love you have so that the end is more powerful and respectful.
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