Where the cold wind blows

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The frozen ground takes2

the time to watch the cold wind blow3

and time seeems to stop.

Does this fit the bill of a haiku?

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  • Blazing Writer
    February 6, 2008
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    Hmm I like this. Haiku, I guess so. But I don't think it stops mid stentence and continues in the new line. Hmm im not sure but I liked this. This has a lot of meaning and different people will see different meanings. Great piece keep up the good job. Also seeems should be seems.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.