As I stared into Mikes eyes I felt my heart skip a beat. His hand reached out and held my neck under my hair. I felt like his touch was the onlything holding me from either falling or floating away. His other hand reached up to lift my chin as our lips gently touched.1
The warm touch seemed hesitent at first but gained confidence little by little. Before I even realized it our lips were moving slowly over eachothers. As we kissed my hands found his soft hair. His hands around my neck lured me closer.2
Soon his mouth was more willing and I rolled my tongue over the roof of his mouth. I pulled back a little to judge his reaction while still kissing him gently. He didn't seem a taken back so I continued.3
I continued to kiss him and then I pulled at his lip in a way that made him surge forward. His hands moved to the small of my back and pulled me forward as we continued to kiss. The air was thick with an energy that made it seem that some one was going to get shocked.4
A flood of light burst accross our faces and was quickly followed by a deep blush over both of our cheeks. With a gulp we turned to face my father who stood at the door with hands on his hips. I don't doubt that he was wishing he had bought that shot gun.
Author notes
Ok so I am just skipping the whole story part since you wanted to learn how to write kissing. I started this at a soft timid kiss and moved it further.
A contest entry
- Help! I need good stories! by Loonamist.
175 points, ended January 18, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Give me a kiss! by Mazzon.
400 points, ended January 16, 2008, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think, I appreciate heavy criticism, my friend stains my paper red with ink correcting it and it is beautiful. Please tell me EXACTLY what you think.
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I'm not fully sure who the author's notes where aimed at, but if me, you misunderstood the point of my contest. I didn't want to learn how to write a kiss, I wanted to read about the emotions surrounding an important kiss, whatever they might be.
...actually while writing this, I just read Loonamist's comment, and that seemed like it was for them. Disregard what I said. Pardon my self-centeredness. -
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um...ok sorry my author's notes are for another contest. I just figured I would get more than one contest entry out of it.
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Thank you!
Oh nice^^ Thanks, this is definitely one of the best. Very helpful and it's much appreciated.
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