Dr. Mills smiled warmly as he waited for my answer. Dr. Jensen folded his arms, looking at me with a more serious expression. 1
"So, I have to decide which of you is real to be declared sane?"2
"Exactly," answered Dr. Mills.3
"Precisely," answered Dr. Jensen.4
I thought about all the conversations I had had with the doctors. Each seemed convinced the other was imaginary. Both seemed very real. Suddenly, the answered came to me.5
"You're both real," I said, grinning at the simplicity of my realization. "I'm the one that's imaginary," I added, before disappearing, leaving them both questioning their sanity.
Author notes
This is a drabble, which is a story that's 100 words in length.
A contest entry
- Insane yet? by Ninja Bubble.
100 points, ended January 7, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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Very cool short story lol. I really liked the whole insanity bit. I don't think any doctor could figure me out either. I need to check out some more of your works. This was quite an imaginative read
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I'm not gonna lie, the story is pretty awesome. It makes the reader really think, and shows a lot of your personality. Nice!
The only thing is, I think you need a comma after 'said' in the last paragraph. Comma rules suck sometimes
Drabbles make my writing hobby possible, because I don't have the patience to write anything much longer...
Thanks for a wonderful read!
annye
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AWESOME!
I sat here at work giggling for 10 minutes before coming back to comment. Hehehee!
Are Mills and Jensen representative of people you know?
You need to add the Drabble tag, I think it would be fun to have more than just yours or mine on here.
This is one of those things that just... you know you love it, but can't quite put your finger on the 'why' of it well enough to describe, y'know?
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Mills and Jensen are sort of representative of all the people who tried to define reality for me, then wound up gaping in shock when I slipped sideways between their rules and defined my own reality.
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You need to tell me more about this later
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Very nicely done. At first I had to reread the first couple of sentences because they didn't seem to make sense to me. I'm not sure but there may be a better way to structure the opening few sentences without comprimsing the word length of the story. Speaking of which, this story is actually 102 words. The StoryWrite word counter is always wrong.
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Hahahahaha...undeniably awesome. You have a very quirky imagination which I'm becoming fond of.
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How clever is this? Well done Heather! Good luck in the contest.
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