It was a cold dark night1
slight wind in the air2
no one around3
just the sounds of the breeze in the trees4
alone I wanted to be5
but not a good idea6
I was soon to see7
Been intrigued by the night8
and all the sounds it makes9
love the thought of dark creatures10
never once afraid of the thought11
of being a victim of the night12
and forever be forgotten13
It was I who was lurking through the trees14
trying to scare you and have some fun15
Burning a fire trying to keep us warm16
Just the two of us camping in the night17
Roasting marshmellows and telling stories18
then all of a sudden we hear 19
a strange noise in the trees20
but we ignore it the first time21
We continue to have some fun22
and act all crazy23
Drinking through the night24
Without a care in the world25
No one else around26
or so we thought27
We heard the same noise once again28
A noise that scared us both29
a noise that would not stop30
We stood there in fright31
trying to figure out where32
the noise was coming from33
We both decided that we didn't care to see34
what the noise was or where the noise35
was coming from36
We just decided to get the hell out37
and not look back38
We took off running into the woods39
the car parked far away40
I had to stop and take a breath41
I began to cry, "I can't do this anymore",42
She took a hold of me and gave me a hug43
that's when I kissed her44
it was unexpected by the both of us45
but she enjoyed it46
then she pulled away47
we took off into the night48
fearing what we could not see49
The noise was getting closer50
And we both felt like giving up51
tired of the running, heading no where52
so we stopped, stood our ground53
deciding we would not show our fear54
of what was about to make it's presence known55
Sounds were coming56
from every direction57
in the tress above and below58
clutched in each others arms59
we began to scream60
"Leave us alone"61
suddenly it stopped62
just stopped, no sound63
the silence made it worse64
we had no idea where it was now65
at least before we could tell66
where "it" was67
now we stand terrified of the unknown68
I turn and look into her eyes69
my god the terror I see70
we are both shaking, tears about to flow71
just then from the nearest tree72
comes a little raccoon73
he runs past us looking a bit shocked74
that there are people in the middle75
of his home in the trees76
Just then I let up on my grip77
we both make eye contact78
and then at the exact same moment79
we bust up laughing80
"Oh my God, it was raccoon"81
We must have looked like 82
little girls after a bad dream83
Giggling we realize we have84
quite a distance to walk85
to get back to camp86
Holding hands we head for camp87
but my mind starts to think88
of everything that just happened89
and how it just doesn't fit90
Unless the raccoon was not alone91
unless there were at least 10 to 1292
it doesn't add up93
the sounds came from everywhere94
like a bat flying thru the trees95
bats are not real level when they fly96
but still it would need to be97
more than one of them as well98
I look over at my best friend99
she is so much more relaxed100
still giggling from it all101
I can't tell her what I am thinking102
don't want to spoil the fun103
Suddenly I feel it104
behind me "it" is there105
I hear her voice tho faintly106
yelling that I am hurting her hand107
She looks at me for a moment108
my eyes wide with fear109
then silence and she pulls on me110
what's wrong, what is it, she whispers111
I am shaking and can't control the tears112
"It's here", I whisper, frozen113
She is starting to yell at me114
that we must run115
but I can't, I stand there116
looking straight ahead117
I hear someone else's voice118
but inside my head119
I start to turn around120
I see her face full of fear and confusion121
and then I see him standing there122
before me as big as life123
It appears in front of our faces124
And we were in total shock125
A gorgeous man stands before us126
A man that we both wanted127
and desired128
We had no idea of what was about129
to happen to either of us130
But we did not care because131
for some reason132
we wanted this man133
and this man wanted us134
Those eyes of his hypnotizing135
putting a spell on us136
his hand out before us137
invited us to his place 138
or should I say his world139
We both felt different140
We followed him like lost puppy dogs141
We stepped into his world142
the most amazing things before our eyes143
he offered us drinks144
and motioned us to sit on the couch145
He sat in between us146
talking to us both147
And after that first drink we148
started flirting with him149
We both had our arms wrapped150
around his neck151
our lives were about to change152
scene two153
We both started to kiss him154
our hands moving from his chest155
to inside his pants156
making him hard157
His tongue inside her mouth158
strong hands rubbing the outside of her jeans159
making her wet, making me wet160
the three of us begin to remove out clothes161
and make our way to his bed162
He grabs a chair and watches163
as Vampira and I begin to kiss164
something he gave us has brought us165
over the edge into ecstasy166
I wrap my arms around her waist167
moving my hands to her ass168
pulling her in close169
I feel her body up against mine170
as I begin to kiss her neck171
playing with her nipples172
making them hard173
I slide my hand174
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n178
to her wet and warm panties179
playing with her clit180
and sticking my finger inside 181
then pulling it out making her moan for more182
I slide my tongue183
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w186
n187
from her neck to her stomach188
and inch my way closer to her treasure.....189
~to be continued~190
Author notes
This will end up being a short story when it is done. Due to the fact I have little time to write these days I am asking my partner in crime to collab with me. I hope you all will enjoy it.
What did you think? Please comment!
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Umm...well, wow. This is my kind of thing...but its interesting. I think though that to make this piece more effective you should try to do it in paragraph form. Then you can add more detail to it and really draw the reader in.
Mistakes that I found:
Marshmallows and though are spelled wrong in your story. in scene two line eight you have the word out when I think you our.
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Wow whos your parnter in crime? I found a typo. Its in the part where "and make out way to his bed". Anywho I'm all about the subject matter.
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cool, is this going to be added to more or will it be in another poem. Either way I'm sure I'll keep enjoying it. keep up the great work.
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I love this poem its sensual (ok thats spelt wrong wheres spellcheck when you need it lol) and theres nothing bad I can say about it please write even more soon adn i'll continue to read
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I laughed so hard about the raccoons... for some reason, the light-heartedness of that seemed out of place with the emotional depth that the rest of the poem/story held. But it was really good. Definitely kept me captivated to the very end.
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Heh heh, raccoons.... heh heh....
dangerous-angel
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This is great Tisha I love this keep it up
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ooooo this was long and good all the way to the end. I even had time to read is again. I hope more of these are coming in the future. .;o)
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sweeeeeeeeeeeeet!!!
im me when the next is posted
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excellent
this is getting good. Great job and you are still making me want more lol. keep it up.
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Delightfully succulent.
Fright and Flight. Dark nights in the woods..., And I would invite you in too..... -
Great
Lol this is like a poem/story type thing very unique i havent seen this before i realy enjoyed reading this i love things about vampires he he he i realy do all the kindy bitting and blood :-)
well done keep up the great work
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This is very interesting! IT's almost as if it's in the form of poetry, but it plays out like a story. Just be careful. Some of your descriptions ramble together a bit and make it a little confusing in certain places. Good write though, keep it comin! -
This is awesome! I always love a good vampire in the night story and I can't wait to read the rest of it. Lemme know asap when you get it done! Beautifully done.
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this is well worth the time to read and the applause. it is so damne captivating and well written. you have quite the imagination. i enjoyed this very much. i love vampyres and darkness. beautiful...oh so beautiful
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Excellent
That was awsome!^^ -
Well, I clicked on this by mistake so I'm going to re-promote it but I enjoyed it very much. Especially the raccoons which weren't. Heh.
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I loved this you kept me intrigue from the first of it.
great job. please write more.
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This kicked ass, I see that you added a few lines here and there in which I feel made it alot better Do you still want me to add more to it...Or are you working on it still??? From ASmileIs4Ever2
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god just dangle the worm in front of my face. i need more
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A wonderful start, very intriguing. I like how you left it, even though it is unfinished, it leaves one wondering what is to happen next, and makes it more likely for one to come back to see what happens. As for not having much time to write, I know how that is. I hope to see more to this, and soon.
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god guys make me wonder
but i love the peom i cannot wait for the rest. keep it going -
if being a vampire means i get to play with cute babes like these, then BITE ME NOW!
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fluff ball stew is delish
yeah dude! i cant wait till you continue this thing...i loooove dark poetry adn stories! hey do me a favor when you come up with more stuff im me or leave a messege on my guestbook! great job vam!ra -
I'm sorry, I will be making a list of those that read it and will let them know as more is added. I was on a roll and then my mind shut off. Damn it. Hugs and bites, Lady Raven
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Doh.... those to be continued things are so frustrating! lol. Especially considering how quickly this drew me in and wasn't about to let up until you ended the darn thing! Shame on you for teasing the reader in such a way. I really enjoyed this... and damn.. check out that picture! I want a pair of boots like that. lol
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