Shenta and Itaro were asleep in their bunk beds. Itaro layed on the top, Shenta on bottom. The night was a dark one. A light flashed through Shenta and Itaro's cell suddenly. It was a patrol guard. He shined the flashlight first at Shenta then at Itaro, lingering on each of them for a few seconds. Finally the guard walked on to the next cell. Once he walked out the exit door, Shenta and Itaro opened their eyes.1
"That should be the last patrol guard," Shenta said, getting up from his bed. Itaro jumped off the top bunk onto the floor. "Okay lets go to work," Shenta said, pulling out a dagger. He walked up to the cell bars and slowly started cutting them halfway through, trying to make as little noise as possibe. When he finished the top of the bars he went to work on the bottom, only cutting halfway through. After awhile Shenta was done. "Finally!You didn't even cut all the way through too,"Itaro said, still half asleep.2
"Keep your voice down. I didn't need to cut all the way through it. Itaro, kick the cell bars," Shenta instructed. "What the...? Well okay," Itaro said. Shenta put the dagger in his pocket and moved out of his way. Itaro kicked the cell bars. Nothing happened except for Itaro crumpling to the ground. "Ow," Itaro moaned.3
"It needs more force,"Shenta said.Shenta and Itaro readyed themselfs and kicked the bars.The cell bars broke off and crashed into the wall on the other side of the hallway."Darn it.Somebody probably heard us,"Shenta muttered.Shenta and Itaro walked through the hallway.They past many cells.When they were almost at the exit they came up to a cell."Hey,"a voice came from out the darkness of the cell.Only the red exit sign gave light.4
Shenta and Itaro stopped walking and looked into the cell.A teenager arose from the darkness."Who are you?,"Itaro asked.Shenta studyed the teenager.The teenager was a boy with hair like Shenta and and Itaro,the teen was just as tall as Shenta and Itaro.The boy wore athe orange uniform that everybody in jail wore."I am Keyutaka,a member of the Element Ninjas.Bust me out of here,"Keyutaka said."Element Ninjas.Who are they?,"Itaro asked."I tell you after you bust me out,"Keyataka said."Why should we help you?,"Shenta asked.."I can help you in your darkest days,"Keyutaka said.5
"What do you mean?,"Itaro asked."If your busting out of here,your going to be in trouble.They know your ninjas.I can help you out Shenta and Itaro,"Keyutaka said."You know were ninjas,"Shenta said."You know our names,"Itaro said."Yeah.What do you say.You'll be lost out there.You can't survive out there without me now,"Keyutaka said."Come on Shenta we don't need him,"Itaro said.6
"Okay then.Tell me how it feels to be on the most wanted list,"Keyutaka said.I have no choice but to trust this guy,Shenta thought.Shenta took out his dagger.They got the Keyutaka out the same way they got themselves out."Freedom,"Keyutaka said.They walked through the exit into a lobby where the front desk was.Luckily nobody was at the front desk or in the lobby."We need to get our bookbags,"Shenta said."Follow me I know this place,"Keyutaka said.Keyutaka led them down another hallway.They stopped at the door at the end of the room.7
On the door "Conference Room" was printed on the door."Conference room?,"Shenta asked."They have been in here the past days,"keyutaka said.How does he know this stuff.Unless he escaped before.What is he up to,Itaro thought.Shenta peered through the glass window of the door.Shenta saw a huge cirle table,and police officers sitting around the table and two bookbags on the table.8
"Our bookbags are in there,"Shenta said."We need a plan,"Itaro said."What plan!,"Shenta shouted.Shenta kicked the door open.The police officers were shocked.Shenta jumped on the table."Shoot him!,"a officer shouted.The stood up and took out guns.Itaro and Keyutaka bursted in.9
Keyutaka grabbed a officer from behind and threw him against the wall.Keyutaka headed at another officer and kicked the gun out of his hand.The gun flew into the air and Itaro caught it.Keyutaka kicked the officer with his other leg.The officer slammed into the wall.Shenta grabbed the bookbags.The officers stood still."What's the matter,can't shoot,"Shenta said.Shenta .punched a officer in his face.The gun flew out of the officers hand onto the table as he slammed against the wall.Shenta picked up the gun and picked up his bookbag.Shenta put the bookbag on his back and kicked the other bookbag at Itaro.10
Itaro caught the bookbag with his free hand and slid it onto his back."Let's go,"keyutaka said.Shenta,Itaro and Keyutaka sprinted out of the room.They rushed down the hallway and into the lobby.Somebody was at the front desk.It was Jeff."Your making a bad mistake!,"Jeff shouted."We will prove were not guilty,"Shenta shouted as they headed through the front doors.The doors slid open and they escaped into the night.11
A few minutes later...........Shenta,Itaro and keyutaka were on the outskirts of the city.They were sitting down."That's over with,"Itaro said."Hey what's that sound,"Keyutaka said.Shenta slid his bookbag off and looked inside."A bomb!,"Shenta shouted."What!,"Itaro and Keyutaka shouted.Shenta stood up and took out the bomb and threw it up in the air toward the moon.The bomb exploded in the air and they were safe.How the it feel to be on the most wanted list?The question repeated through Shenta's mind.
Author notes
This is the last part of Chapter 1 of the Black Ninja.Get ready for
The Black Ninja
Chapter 2(Part One)
Most Wanted
Chapter Two will be very interesting.You'll find out what secrets Keyutaka has.
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Comments
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nice, x]. i like it, how its all thought out and everything, makes me want to read more :]

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I loved it and i can't wait to read more
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I like the names you've used. This is a good story, so edit out the technical mistakes and keep writing! <3
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Just a suggestion for the future; if you're going to enter a contest, try and enter the first part of a series. That way the judge knows what's going on in the story. ^_^ Just for future reference.
You have a LOT of spelling/grammar/punctuation mistakes. Plus you're missing the spaces between sentences (standard is two spaces between). There are capitalization errors.
This of your story as some sort of product (an MP3 player, a piece of jewelry, whatever) and your writing as the packaging. When you've got great spelling/grammar/punctuation, the packaging is whole and it's up to your actual writing skill to make the box colorful. At the moment, your box is so beaten up, I'm not a hundred percent sure it can even hold itself together.
Run it through a spell checker, either on Word or an internet one. This needs it, desperately. -
It has the makings of an excellent story!
just a few minor errors; were in some parts should be we're as in we are. The overall of the story was pretty good still.
Keep it up!

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thats an interesting story! I am looking forward to chapter 2 alot.
Awsome.
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