fierra

A fabled story I once wrote,
about a girl name Fierra.
Sad story indeed,
that was an edited version of mine.1

September 18 was the day she was born.
With greenish blue eyes and rosy cheek,
she was left alone,in the alien world.2

Her eyes always rains,
as tragedy stalked her every move.
Sun hated her beauty,
So,lived in the dark she was,
for a long long time.3

Bipolar and depression
alienated her from the society.
No one but sorrow and loneliness,
accompanied her through this harsh,cold world.4

Though the world has been harsh to her,
she was kind to the world.
Helping the needy along the way,
pick up a few good deeds here and there.5

God loved her so much.
He took her pure,undamaged soul,
for he could not bare any longer
to see her in pain.6

So,that was the story,
of a pretty,divine girl,
name Fierra.

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  • Lady Nikki Sixx
    March 8, 2008
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    Excellent. I can relate to this Fierra. From reading this, she seemed like a girl with lots of beauty inside her and she was full of good. You wrote this so beautifully and excellent. Great job with this. I wish you luck in the contest and hope you do well.

    Take care,

    -Lady Nikki Sixx-


  • Midnightmare
    March 8, 2008

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    Good piece you have written here.
    I found that the flow perhaps was a bit choppy but not too bad. some lines were longer than others and made it a bit out of wack.
    This girl does seem like a real gem... this was a great piece to acknowledge that by.
    Well done and thanks for entering =D


  • Melissa Loves Jeffy
    December 29, 2007

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    I like this Fierra. She seem like a girl with divine beauty inside and out. This is very beautiful. Maybe god will someday take evey pure soul who does pure deads. The world is just harsh period. One thing that needs to be learned is that no one is excepted by many because so many are different. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!