Feelings

The gloomy, cloudy sky displays sinister tones of deep blues, blackened by the lack of any light, be it from neither the sun nor the moon. In the sky there are no stars just perpetual darkness. Everything is absolutely dead silent; not a bird can be seen nor heard at all.1

The heavens above provide a matching contrast to the waters below. The tempestuous, icy, hasty ocean offers not a better sighting than the firmament. Its shadowy greens and shady blues offer a murky, fiery look. The wild, turbulent waters, throw enormous, furious, unstoppable waves crashing against the rocks. 2

Nobody would dare approaching the strong currents, yet there she is, a woman, dressed in a simple, long, silky, white robe which floats in the stormy wind; her long hair, untied, untidy, flowing freely in the blustery weather, whips against her emotionless face. 3

She is standing still, right on the edge of the cold rocky cliff, with the salty water splashing on her face; the furious, gusty wind keeps pressing forward, pushing her further to the edge, yet she does not move or react. Her mind is blank, void.4

Her eyes, stone cold, expressionless, look nowhere. She appears immobile, like a statue, numb, as if she is in coma. Her arms, extended to their full length, are holding, over the ocean, as if presenting it, the young, cold, frail, lifeless body of her only child.5

Time is going by, yet, she doesn’t move, she doesn’t stare, she doesn’t feel any more, she is past redemption or pain, she is just standing there, facing the gruesome strength of the inexorable forces of nature.6

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Despair

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  • Violette silver member
    June 14

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    ooo, not surprised you won trophies for this. The imagery and description was astouding. Even better than the last ones I read.
    My favourite part was the last paragraph, so raw it was insane. You are very talented writer.


  • beezy92
    March 13, 2008

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    GREAT GREAT GREAT! *sighs* I almost wish it wasn't. There are so many wonderful pieces n my contest It's driving me crazy. But this piece was wonderful...the description...the plotline, the meaning. Finalist list (=

  • parntsoftwins
    December 30, 2007

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    Very sad, yet the imagery you portray in this is amazingly strong. Such a way with your descriptive words. You allow the reader to actually see what you have placed before them, allowed them to not have to try hard to picture the stroy you are telling. Well done, I wish you the best of luck in the contest!

  • BabyxBadger
    December 29, 2007

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    Sad story, but beautifully written. It's so nice to hear people describe everything again. It drew me in, and I clung on to every word. Great job, happy holidays and keep up the good work.xxx


  • PorSiempre
    December 29, 2007

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    Good job!
    I really enjoyed your descriptions. The scenario definitely expressed your emotion. It seemed to just be calling out "despair, despair". You did a very good job of showing and only doing a little telling. The scene came out very powerful, and all of the set-up you did really made a difference when you dropped the bomb of "lifeless body of her only child". Good luck in the contest.
    -PorSiempre

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