Gorgeous bikes,
Wind sifting through my hair,
hot guys to flirt with1
Motocross- My soul
a younger form of Harleys
But a lot more dirt2
Red rocks to jerk over,
taking place on the sands
flying over the checkered flag3
Team sponsorships,
Paid to organize
their burning desire4
Anticipation
all I want is that trophy
With my name written on it
Author notes
don't know if this is my final entry just yet.
A contest entry
- The Poet's Challenge -- Round III by Asfand.
100 points, ended January 11, 2008, 5 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice. I like it. Specially like the words you used. Keep writing. Mew!
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Ohhh, I especially like that last stanza. It closed the poem very well. :-)
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I really liked the theme, it's original in a sense that I have not seen it being used anywhere before. The phrasings are - okay - not your best right, you felt definitely restricted by the syllables, I think. not your strongest piece, but it's pretty good!
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ily.
Oh, very good. VERY good! Heh
I liked it though. Haha, your so obbsesed with this motocross thing, I think you may need rehab 
jaykay, or am i being serious! hah 
well, anyways i really like it, great style, and it was put together pretty well, good job. and i dislike you! cuz its goooood ahha, im trying to write, which i did like 2 or so pages, so i dont know what to write. and i want this girl to.... my god. Can you message me? hehe ily.
KEEP WRITING!
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Well Done!!
Lol nice write Santa
^_^! I love it hehe^_^ Nice haiku simply tells of how excited a girl entering a motorbike contest and wanting to win Now you made me wonder what is her true purpose of winning is it to show guys that girls can be equally good at biking or something else hehehe
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This is an awsome poem =)
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