Belittle us, Mother,1
Were we not good enough for you?2
where did we go wrong?3
Confuse us, mother.4
Did you hate us all along?5
Your own spawn you forsake.6
How heartless.7
To leave us here,8
To our own devices.9
Leave us in this man-made hell?10
How could you?11
It's all your doing, mother.12
Our foundation,13
that you were supposed to build-14
cracked and shaken.15
But still,16
I'd never say I hate you,17
Mother.18
Author notes
No notes.
Just tears.
A contest entry
- A Third Poetry Contest by Melissa Loves Jeffy.
175 points, ended December 30, 2007, 23 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Jeffy, good job... you seem to tape into emotional side of things fairly well...
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"No notes.
Just tears." I wanted to eat that part, it was deliciously good! But who exactly is this mother? -
This is a really amazing write. Its short but thats whats so great about it. This is a sad poem =(. Good use in vocabulary =). That will get you somewhere in this contest ^.^ Well when I find out who you are after this I wanna read more of your work. Just remind me to. Anywayz...Keep writing and good luck!!!! ^.^.^.^.^
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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