Look at only what’s in front of you now…
believe in those you believe in…
Love and despair will turn into feathers,
and become immortal wings
That will revive my pulse1
My vows to you, my dreams,
the limits of life, the limits of love
A kiss by a trembling voice
And going towards a future without limits…2
Even just a little is enough,
if you smile for me
I will become a knight of twilight,
and devote my everything to you3
I don’t need strength,
if it is to save only one person
Even if you were to loop the time of a hundred years,
I will stay in steadfastness, watching over you.
No matter how many times I collapse,
as long as I see the sky, the answers should be there
Because there is no such thing as a world without you4
I will always be by your side,
I will stay by you whenever it may be
Even if everything in this world is your enemy,
I will be a shield to only you
Before I knew it, my tears lights up tomorrow,
towards the sun of miracles
I have already gone, on the wings of desire,
because I knew there is something I want to protect...
Author notes
Hm...something I thought of before work! Going to enter this into a contest yay^_^! Please tell me how was it
A contest entry
- A Third Poetry Contest by Melissa Loves Jeffy.
175 points, ended December 30, 2007, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me your comments and what you think about it!
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"Even just a little is enough,
if you smile for me
I will become a knight of twilight,
and devote my everything to you"
Oh how I loved that stanza it was amazng and so romantic and beautiful,I would be overwhelmed with love for a manif he had said something like that to me, or wrote something like that for me, it is so amazing this piece it should get published. It is an excellent piece and there are loads of paragraphs I love :-
"I will always be by your side,
I will stay by you whenever it may be
Even if everything in this world is your enemy,
I will be a shield to only you"
Awww!! it was wonderful I really enjoyed reading this well done love! 10/10 keep it up!!
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wow you are really good at making poems and see you got gold trophie because your so good.. great job :
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WOW you won gold for this one! I'm so proud!
You did such a wonderful job on this poem!
Awesome!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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mmm... yep, dark knight
Very well done yet again... even though some of the wording while beautiful does alter from the story that you are trying to tell. The sun of miracles and wings of desire, these words are beautiful and yet I don't understand why they are there... Could you explain these words and their meanings to me? Otherwise, excellent work.
DarkOne -
Yet again, you are one of the best poets I know. Keep these coming buddy.
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hunki *_*
no words can descrieb how deeply this sank into my heart and filled me up with the most purest of sweetest things with a love so strong for your woman... I bet she knows how much u mean to her, and how you could never be without her love -
A tender display of love enhanced by a desire to protect the loved one. Very well written, Luke.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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This was so beautiful and romantic <3. I loved and enjoied to read this. my favorite part was"I will always be by your side,
I will stay by you whenever it may be
Even if everything in this world is your enemy,
I will be a shield to only you
Before I knew it, my tears lights up tomorrow,
towards the sun of miracles
I have already gone, on the wings of desire,
because I knew there is something I want to protect... " Thats what really got me and pulled me in =). Such determination and a want to protect someone so loved. It was filled with so much emotion... God this was truely amazing. Great job!!! Keep writing and good luck in the contest!!!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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first of this stanza is my favorite
My vows to you, my dreams,
the limits of life, the limits of love
A kiss by a trembling voice
And going towards a future without limits…2
second of all this poem is very inspirational. the opening is the most inspiration i've acknowledged in a very long time.
very good bar here "Even if you were to loop the time of a hundred years,
I would go and receive you" BUT "i would go and receive you." doesn't make much sense
favorite single line "Because there is no such thing as a world without you"
goodluck in the contests and very good poem my friend
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Another beautiful piece! i hope you like my comments (haha) as much as I love reading your work. great piece! thanks for a great read
KEEP WRITING!
-Melli<33
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