Adaption: Prologue

The beach glistened under the half moon's light, wet from the water gently lapping over it. The grass that met the beach a few yards up the sandy dunes swayed in the light wind that blew off the ocean. Two pairs of tracks made they're way across the sand, solitary in the still night. A third set of footsteps led up to the young man who stood over the young womans mangled body, sprawled over the sandy shores of Willowsweep. 1

The young man stood gapping in horror at the bloody body, then quickly raised his head and looked about for another soul, perhaps the woman's murderer. But the beach was now empty, and the other track of footsteps along those of the womans led into the water, disappearing under the gentle waves.2

The police were alerted of the womans death, but they were unable to find anything. The woman's turned out to be Villa Treniar, a local of the sleepy town. After three months of no clues, no hints, and no convictions, the police were forced to give up. The woman's will was read and her valuables passed onto relatives.3

Villa Treniar's relatives requested the right to at least know how she died, but even that was found a mystery. She had been found with several scratches and cuts, but the coroner was unable to find any of them fatal. Despite this he was forced to write that the young woman had died of blood loss. Four broken bones, a cracked skull, several cuts along her arms and a few on her forehead, but these all occurred postmortem. 4

The only injuries she seemed to have sustained were two small puncture marks on her lower neck, both too small to have caused enough damage to result in death.5

So Villa Treniar's death stayed unsolved, and soon melted into one of the many old horror stories of the town, told to scare little kids into coming in before dark, or to keep them from sneaking cookies at night. The story was twisted and changed as most mysteries are, until each family had their own version. Only one person knew what had really happened, how Villa Treniar had really died, but he would never tell anyone. After all, Vampire's never tell secrets.

Author notes

Hehe, I know, it probably seems a little over done, but it's my very first Vampire story. Please tell me what you think, and if I should change the style a bit so it doesn't seem over used.

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  • im...
    January 1, 2008

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    hmmm

    It was very well written, but it just didn't click with what I was looking for. However it was wonderfull..please don't get me wrong, but...like I said it didn't click. SOrry


  • Ninja Bubble
    December 28, 2007

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    Well im not one for vampires, as I am a ninja, but it was wonderfully written still though. I loved it somewhat, which is a lot when I dont like vampires at all.