How long has it been since I was stashed under Lori's mattress? Days? Weeks? Months? Without daily entries, I have no way of marking the passage of time, but it does feel like it's been a while. My spine aches from not having been opened. 1
The shock of feeling weight on my back through the mattress gives me a surge of hope. Lori's returned! The few blank pages I have left are filled with anticipation. 2
Why is she waiting so long to pull me out? Doesn't she realize how much I've missed hearing what's been going on in her life? Finally! No, I'm not on that side of the bed. Why are you reaching for me there? Ah, you found me!3
Wait a minute. You're not Lori. You're her mom! What are you doing with me? How'd you find her key? No, don't open me! Don't you know these are private, personal thoughts Lori only shared with me?4
I can't believe it. You've read every page. Don't you have any respect at all? Hold on there. What are you doing with that pen? 5
"Dear Diary,6
Please forgive me for intruding, but I needed to know what had been going through my daughters head. She didn't leave a note or anything, and I've been spending the past few weeks wondering if I had done something to make her want to take her life.7
I've also been wanting to say the words I always thought, but never got around to saying as often as I had intended.8
I love you, Lori. I will always, always love you."9
Author notes
Here's some kinda random info about me:
My favorite candy is Raisinets, my favorite band is Eurythmics (well, Annie Lennox, actually), and at the moment my favorite book is "The Blue Girl" by Charles de Lint.
A contest entry
- Open for ALL Categories (6 options) by FreeStyleBlue.
375 points, ended January 8, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - +Emo+ by heartfullofvenom.
300 points, ended February 9, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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aw, -tear-
God this is sad. And it's a really great short story. I like how you wrote from the books point of view.
Good Luck!
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Me likes. ^_^ It made the story so much more interesting that the diary was speaking instead of the mother or daughter. Nice work!
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This was very unique; I enjoyed reading it!
Regards,
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Awesome! Thank you for entering. It was a nice touch, using a diary to tell the story, and not the people. It says more about the sheer emotion of it than if the girl or the mother had been the subjects. Good luck in the contest.
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another great write
I anticipated the ending so it appears that it was well structured and a good foundation laid. enjoyed it.
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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Oh, how completely sad this is. This is so well written. I'm quite affected by strong emotions.
I didn't expect the ending.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Amazing story! Very brill!=)
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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