As shining winter fairies come floating down
I kissed your smiling picture because I had nothing else to do
At that long line outside of the movies, we vowed
To never stand in line here together again
But since my heart is next to yours
I still miss you even as a friend
But I can't turn back ever again1
I love you, I want to see you again
With a kiss, expressed alongside ten billion snowflakes
Until the day that we happen to cross paths some place
Baby, even if you forget me
Is it okay for me to still love you?
I'll never be able forget you2
Since the moment that I was alone
I've realised what true loneliness is
These overwhelming feelings in my heart that won't stop flowing out,
the way to love a person
Is so important that I think a person shouldn't forget it
No matter how many times I changed
I'll never let go of that voice or that dream3
Even if you love someone else as time flows by
I'll still remember you
Our destined meeting and the warmth we shared
I'm glad that it was you, and I can say it from my heart
Until we meet someday again...
Author notes
A Merry Christmas To everyone who reads this ! Enjoy Kind of sad but still I think it should do it
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this is cute write more stuff like this.
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Great imagery. Not a poem-er...is that a word, but pretty sweet. =P
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xD I'm glad I read this, Luke! You're right, very different. I've read a ton of poems set in this genre, but this is very distinctly different.
I like the first line, beautiful simile. xD And this line:
"No matter how many times I changed
I'll never let go of that voice or that dream"
Great read!
-HT
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This is a very sweet poem and really sad.
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Excellent!
This is a wonderful poem! You have strong and passion emotions with powerful details that pulled me into this piece!
Outstanding Poem!
Lynn
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This is so sweet and beautiful! I love this! Merry Christmas to you too! This poem looks lke 3 run-on sentences bunched in a stanza but this isn't bad
Good job!
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Lovely!
This was a really sad but still adorable poem. but i think that the love is stronger than the loneliness and the sad feelings. this is true love. the grammar and the way you choose your words was perfect.
truly a really good and adorable poem
keep ut the good work
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so emotional and wonderful.
truely a nice job.
favorite part:
With a kiss, expressed alongside ten billion snowflakes
Until the day that we happen to cross paths some place
what an awesome line. it is amazing. great job
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aww thats so precious!!!!i luv it so much u can do a way better job than i can,for sure
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Oh darling! This poem was so wonderful! You wrote this so very well! I'm so proud!
Awesome Job!
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can you give me some tips to make great stories i stink at makin them
thanks -
You are a great writer
WOW!! what great feeling i LOVE it
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I like the pace of this story, the short dialog is excellent as is the flow of the piece. I think that with a little bit of expansion this story could grow long legs. -
awwwwwww
well you melted my heart. I felt bad for this person. I know what he's going through
i wanted to go up and give him a hug (if the character existed lol)
first off i think you should put a space between "These overwhelming feelings in my heart that won't stop flowing out
The way to love a person" <-- that line, right after out. "billion" i like how you didnt go cliche` with saying million but it might have worked a lil bit better. cause it was a bit derailed once i read billion lol.
my favorite lines "As shining winter fairies come floating down"
"No matter how many times I changed
I'll never let go of that voice or that dream"
&& "I love you, I want to see you again
With a kiss, expressed alongside ten billion snowflakes
Until the day that we happen to cross paths some place
Baby, even if you forget me
Is it okay for me to still love you?
I'll never be able forget you" THAT ENTIRE THING LOL. GOOD JOB - GOODLUCK - MISS NIKKILICIOUS
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great symbolism
"Shining winter Fairies" rather than simply saying "it's snowing" It sets the tone for something magical to happen. In this case it is love although only one sided.
Good description of emotion
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This is amazing and really sad. I could relate to it. Great job!!!
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This is beautiful and sad. Well crafted, with simplicity. Quite an emotional piece with it's bitter-sweet memories.
Well written.
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Aww... *big hug*
Even though I don't feel any romantic feelings towards that hug, everyone deserves a hug for Christmas... true and from the heart, true and pure.
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Ahh, that is sad, but i still loved this peice! I think I've read two of your pieces and already I'm hooked!!! You have an amazing writing style, and i love it. Awesome job on this one! It was sad, but very interesting. You did an awesome job, keep it up. Well im off to read more!
Keep writing!!!!!
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why you gotta be so god damn beautfull hunki.... each word is more grippin than the last with sadness within a deep love
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