fleeting away. ( INCOMPLETE, its on going, so dont read. If you do, then you have to read the rest later on>.

It was a cold winter night, the snow's icy surface shined off the moon light that was so high in the sky. The light bounced right off of the snow's ice and hit the eyes of a beautiful hazeled eye girl who sat all alone in the forest of where she lives. Her nutmeg hair long and has never been cut a day in her life.1

Despise the fact she lives in nature and only nature, her hair is surprisingly neat. 2

In fact, it looks as though she brushes it every day. And it shines every so brightly in the moonlight. 3

For somebody who has never been in a community, she looks very healthy. 4

Though her head features look beautiful, her body is raged and damaged from nature alone. Her clothes, that she has worn most of her life, were torn up and dirty. Her knee length black skirt had rips and dirt every where, a long rip went right up her left leg and just below her hips. 5

Her dark blue sleeveless top had several patches that look as though they came from wolves fur, and as the skirt does, it has dirt smudged all over. 6

Her legs and arms had cuts and bruises, blanketing her beautiful pale skin. 7

To sum up her appearance, she wore big round white earrings that were giving to her at birth. And she has a marking on her forehead, the Japanese one that represents youth. 8

It took shape of a star type thing, or it could look like a crest. 9

It depends what your imagination shows you. 10

The young girl, 13 to be exact, looked up at the sky.11

it was clear of clouds, and it filled with thousands of stars. A full moon was visible right in the center of it all. 12

And since it is a clear sky, it was deathly cold out. The young girl shivered and picked up her fur type cape. it was black and wore a fox's tail with white tips. On the upper part of it was a mask that covers the upper part of the face, it was in the shape of a skull, and the color was white. Standing out from the rest of the features. placed on top of the mast that is connected to the fur cape, was two pointy black fox ears, and they too had white tips. 13

she placed the fur on, and pulled down the mask. Her beautiful features now covered by the skull. Picking up a thing similar to a sword, she ran off into the cold winter night, and through the forest. her foot steps soft and silent, leaving behind tracks of small feet. 14

' tomorrow..' the word repeated in her mind. Remembering what tomorrow was. 15

' tomorrow..' 16

She ran through the forest, her speed almost inhuman. Her Fur cape type thing flowing behind her at her speed. The tail bouncing up and down, and her bare legs and arms freezing cold.17

' its times like this... i wish i had more clothes' she thought intently.
It took only 5 minutes to approach where she was longing to go. And here she is, at her home. A cave at the top of a high mountain, with the moon Shining behind it casting a shadow to cover the entrance of the cave.
Entering the cave she dropped her belongings and removed her accessories, which are the fur and mask, the sword dropped to the ground and made a low thump as it hit the stone floor. 18

She sighed and sat down into a pile of leaves, her bed. Shivering, she reached for her fur blanket and wrapped it around her cold skin. 19

" freezing tonight isn’t it...?" A scratchy sounding voice echoed through the cave, the source of the voice coming from the shadows deeper in. A shadowy figure was just barely seen in the darkness, taking the figure of what appears to be human, though there are Strange featured additional figures to the shadow.
" The snow falls lightly and the air stays harshly cold. Not the type of whether fit for a human such as yourself-"
The figure began to speak again, but was found to be cut off by the girl. 20

" Human?! don’t label me into such a despicable category. Humans are cold, heartless creatures that are cruel and unloving to Nature kind.. and to me. When my transformation is complete... I will no longer be human. so Shut it. " She snapped harshly, her hazel eyes sparked with anger as they glared at the shadowy figure. Her teeth clattering and her body shivering. Despite what she says, she knows that what the figure is saying is true, it is harshly cold out and not fit for some one such as herself.21

The figure chuckled lightly , amused at the way the girl snapped.
" calm yourself. Before your transformation, Mine must be complete. You should sleep now, some one of such weakness as yourself needs their sleep. I will stay on watch, Kaori."22

Kaori ( who we now know is the girl ) Glared at the figure as it walked to the entrance of the cave, the shadows some how seemed to follow it. Never has kaori seen the face of this figure, nor does she know the gender, name, or where it even came from.
This figure was anonymous.
A stranger to all, even a stranger to Kaori. Who was the adopted daughter of this figure, through nature's ways. 23

' i know nothing about you... but when the transformation is being proceeded. You will have to reveal yourself. And when my transformation is done, I will kill you personally myself, and settle our little war with humans on my own accord. With the clan of Kitsune's. '

Just a short story. I might make chapters, but i'm just setling with this for now, besides, i have like two other series's to work on.

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  • UnEdibleChick
    February 8, 2008

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    This is interesting, Amaya. This must be a draft though. This is pretty good. That anonymous person or thing is...weird and mean, from my point of veiw. Well I'm trying to win a gold membership. So this is a challenge


  • perfect paradox
    December 23, 2007

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    Sweet!

    Lovely! I'll check up later to see if there is anything else! Some itches I hade was you need to upper case the first letter of the sentence. You sort of miss some of them. You also forgot to caps I. Just informing you

    I loved "The light bounced right off of the snow's ice and hit the eyes of a beautiful hazeled eye girl " part. It was amazing! You have an amazing way of describing things! Keep up the good work and I'll check up later for more updates!