The light was dim. The street empty. Empty except for a girl and her mother. Hands tightly clasped together.1
The mother was a tall beautiful blond with shinning blue eyes. An obvious model her, younger years. She had given it all up for the tiny child gripping her soft hand. Though she wore a smile on her full lips, the pain of the father's death was still an open wound in her heart.2
The girl, Paige, was an average 5 year old girl. She was thin with deep red hair and light brown eyes. She resembled her late father. As his did, her eyes always danced with joy and mirth. Little did she know they would soon be devoid of feeling for what would seem forever.3
"Mommy, Mommy are we almost there? I'm hungry." Little Paige whined.4
"Yes sweetie, we're almost there" Her mother replied.5
Paige squeezed her mother's hand tighter. She glanced at the full moon glowing red against the star-less sky. Shivers traveled down her back. The only light came from the lamps lined up all down the street. Paige involuntarily flinched every time they walked past a dark ally. Most of the shops were closed and there seemed no where to run for shelter. Paige pulled closer to her mother who took her own arm and wrapped her arm around Paige.6
"Mommy I don't like the dark..."7
Suddenly, Paige's mother stopped dead in her tracks. Paige looked up at her mother's face. Her expression was horrified, fear evident in her blue eyes.8
Paige followed her mother's gaze to a man standing fiercely in front of them. His deep black eyes, lustful. An evil grin playing on his thin lips. His black hair matched the black sky above. His skin was as pale at the white dress adoring Paige's small body. Surrounding him was an eerie darkness that seemed to be made up of fear itself. Despite all this, what scared her the most was his sharp fangs, glistening in the moonlight.9
"Run..." her mother said loosening her grip.10
Paige turned back to her mother.11
"Run, sweetie, run..."12
"Mommy..."13
"GO!"14
Paige strayed out of her mother's arm and started to run. She turned back after a few feet in time to see the man sink his fangs into her mother's neck, draining her energy. Her mother's agonizing scream welled up the tears in Paige's eyes.15
...16
Paige sat up in her bed. Sweat pouring down her face. Tears on the brim of her lids. She'd been having the name nightmare for twelve years.17
She lifted the sheets off her and swung her legs over the side of the bed. She glanced at her alarm clock. 4 AM. She trudged toward the bathroom, stripping herself of her night gown Slowly, she stepped into the shower. She turned on the hot water and let it wash away the remains of her nightmare.18
Paige strapped up her black boots and jumped onto her shiny black motorcycle. A 550 cc metallic, jet black sportster with gleaming chrome engine and handlebars. It had beautiful black body that reflected the moon's light.19
She sped toward an old abandoned factory she'd found a couple of days ago. Most of the windows were blown out and it was rusted all over. It was dark inside and out. Perfect home for a vampire.20
Paige slipped off her helmet, letting her deep red hair fall down her shoulders. She set the helmet on her bike and walked toward the rusted building. She slowly ran her hand across the beat up metal door. Feeling for the vampire's presence. She pushed it open stepping into the darkness with caution. There was much dust. It made her cough horridly. It wasn't very big and looked like a storage room. Dusty boxes and broken down machines everywhere. 21
She stepped into the dark building with caution. She could feel him approaching. She'd been searching for him for years. Vampires had become her obsession. They'd took the one person she'd loved more than anything and now she wanted revenge.22
Her eye caught a movement in the shadows. She could feel him. He was there and he wasn't alone. 23
"Come out come out where ever you are..." she mumbled bitterly.24
Paige let her knife slide down her sleeve. She swiftly turned her heels and shoved the knife into the gut of an unnatural being. A shrill cry erupted from the creature. Another jumped out clawing at her wildly. She quickly pulled the knife out of the first and stabbed it into the next. Crimson blood spattered all over her. 25
"You again.." a cold voice remarked. 26
Paige turned around looking into the shadows. A glass mirror shattered on the concrete floor. She turned again to see no one. Suddenly an arm snaked around her slender waist. Sharp fangs lightly pierced the flesh of her creamy skin. Blood trailed down her neck. He gently licked some away, making her squirm. 27
"You've been following me, why?" he whispered into her ear.28
She was silent for a moment, quickly slipping out of his arms She threw a side kick to his ribs but he was too fast for her. He moved and all she kicked was air.29
"I underestimated you, little girl." 30
She threw a punch at him, missing by an inch. His hand caught her arm, attempting to pull her toward him. She put all her strength into her arm and sent him flying into a table. The table broke in half.31
"I'm been looking for you for 12 years now shut up and die."32
She threw a wooden stack straight towards his heart. He caught it and threw it right back. It lightly cut into her flesh. The vampire glanced out the window, sensing the approaching sun rise.33
"It's time I finish you off, little girl. Lucky I'm not thirsty."34
He rushed at her, slamming her into the cement wall. Paige screamed in pain before collapsing on the cold floor. 35
"Until next time."
Author notes
well My friend Steven helped me with some of the descriptions and my other friend Brian helped me with the motorcycle.
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Comments
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Right off the bat, the title is KICK ASS!! I love Mcr!
I like the imagery and the emotion that's behind the words. The encounter with the dark man is amazing! I love the child's point of view! It's so cute and yet, it adds that innocence and that view that everything dark is scary! Oh, Loving the flash to the future! The transition is SO magnificent! Also, nice bike! I like how she goes after the vampire who killed her mom. I think that shows she has issues and the cliff hanger at the end is very cool. Good point to stop!
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Interesting... I really liked your storyline, but I thought that your descriptions weren't detailed enough. The fight with her and the vampire was a bit rushy, and I think you could've done with some more emotions. She's been wanting revenge for 12 years, I think she might have a bit more of a reaction to the vampire.
I loved it when you wrote "I'm been looking for you for 12 years now shut up and die."
That was nicely expressed, though it should've been 'I've been looking for you for 12 years now shut up and die'
Sorry if I'm sounding like a stuck up arse, but hey- I loved your title! Three Cheers For Sweet Revenge- nice! And yes, I know it's an album from MCR.
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I loved the new one! A warning when you said "12 years" it should be "twelve years".
Otherwise, I loved this new version! Keep up the great work! -
Great
Nice part! I want to read the next part! You could add some more detail on the character's appearance but I love the description of the man.
You really used suspense! Keep up the good work and I want to read the next part!



