Like the chords of a piano
You made me sing
Like the blooming flowers at springtime
You made me blush1
To the times of myspace
Instant message
And gifted thoughts
A cheer for the times you made feel like mush2
I know our time has been short
And I know that we know so few
But when it comes to the heart
I long for the days along the pews3
To the times of my first mistake
And to the times of my second scowl
You know you'll always be near my soul
Two cheers for the actions we'd never partake4
I know you have another
And I know of your feelings
But these thoughts
Horrible thoughts that make me shudder5
I hope you feel better and hold no regrets
For peace and quiet are almost a tease
Let those emotions that you felt once before
Make yourself in the future, feel tranquil and at ease6
Christmas is near
And jolly old Nick is preparing this year
Dont forget me my friend
For I'll always be aound, no fear7
The gingle of the new year
The twinkle of the sky
So much that reminds me of you
Three cheers!
For the plea
For the smile
For the wasted hope
And to the "Us" that never was
Author notes
I would like to dedicate to the person who actually gave me my new life, my 2nd wind, my new muse.
[name held confidential], i hope you feel better my bud
I think i overdid this a little.
You, my gallant friends dont think so do you?
A contest entry
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Comments
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no actually I like the visuals that come to my mind when I read this. Well written it is. Good write. Interesting and uses imagery very well. Thanks for sharing thi with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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This was pretty good, however, i thought the myspace thing in the second stanza was off topic from everything else, and you don't really need it in there. Otherwise, great job!! Just try to edit this and it could be a little better. Best of luck and thanks for entering!!
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Real life experience hun. It's completely relevant. Thanks for the comment.
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oh, im so sorry!! i didn't know that. I feel guilty now, lol. Anyway, thanks for entering!
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Oh it's quite alright deary. I get that a lot.
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good i like it... alot... thanks
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good i like it... alot... thanks
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This is very beautiful and sweet. You made a few mistakes and there isn't much puncuation in this but there are no big mistakes. Great job. Thanks for entering. Good luck and keep the great work up.
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Interesting piece. It was like telling a love story, but in poem form. Very good, you let the emotion of the poem take over your words.
Great job, and good luck in my contest
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wow that's amazing!!! i loveee
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Simply wonderful:D
Lol
Definately have to agree this is a powerful piece. The way the whole poem rythmed and flowed Just perfect
A real well piece of work written! Hi5 For ya^_^! Keep the good work up^_^!
"Hope you feel better and hold no regrets
For peace and quiet are almost a tease
Let those emotions that you felt once before
Make yourself in the future, feel tranquil and at ease"
That was my fav part Very interesting Keep up the good work
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Breathtaking.
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thnx kurt!
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Very...stunning, I thought it flowed with out flaw, and the emotion stung me a little but it was truly amazing. You described the feelings so well...fingers crossed for your winning!
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This is such a beautiful poem!! The backround matches it lol. Gallent is a really powerful word to describ someone. Maybe you should show this to the one you wrote about. I think they would love it. Its a really sweet and fantastic poem. Great job and good luck in the contest!
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Yes, this truly is a powerful poem. I especially love the last line... very deep.
The rhyme scheme, kinda confusing, but all in all, a great poem. The emotion, was in my opinion, one of acceptance, and it's beautiful.
Good luck!
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This is a really powerful poem. I really like the way you wrote it; it really flows smoothly, what with the rhyme and the subject matter. I can totally relate to this, considering my girlfriend lives in Florida, but I digress. This is a really concise, well-rounded poem. Kudos!
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Like it a lot
Nicely written and sincere poem, yea, it is full on adoration, but having said that it isn't sick making. Touching, carefully written and simple
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I loves the short , sharp and delicate words you have chosen for this peice, it well rounds and concludes the peice with a sense of awe... that smile that felling you just can't help but be overjoyed with... you depicted friendship in plenty of great mannners
Love Blair xoxox Keep it up
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