The garden was silent as the music started to play, over 50 people were seated on white chairs, there heads turning to the back door as it came open. Shayne stood at the front of the alter staring at the minister in front as he fidgeted wit his cufflinks nervously. He watched the ministers face as she came into view then he turned, following the red carpet down the to the doors. She stood there smiling her bright smile as she waited for the flower girl to go, her pretty purple dress bouncing as she nearly skipped down to the alter. 1
Liz glided along the carpet, her white dress falling behind her. 2
Her dress showed her curvy figure down to her waste, then it flowed out with little flower designs running all over it. Half her shoulder was covered by the thick see-through strap with a few small flowers holding it up. Her short blonde and black hair combed over into a swirly style. A light veil covered her face to reach her chest, the back went down to reach the floor, it dragged along as she stared at him with her baby blue eyes. 3
His black hair combed back, showing the blonde tips nicely and a wide grin stood on his face, excitement in his hazel eyes. She noticed his new tuxedo fit him perfectly as she outlined his chest with her eyes and started to imagine the honey moon. 4
'God she looks beautiful' he thought. She seemed to float to him, her eyes catching his, her smile as bright as ever. She stopped next to him as they looked at each-other. All eyes were on them.5
'God he looks so handsome' she thought as the music slowly stopped and the minister started to speak loud and clear,6
"We are gathered here today-" his voice echoed through her head as she got lost in his gorgeous eyes. 7
She soon came back to reality as the minister lightly nudged her, she let out a slight giggle and looked at Shayne once again.8
"Shayne?" the minister said, waiting for him to start, he smiled and looked at Liz, pure love and devotion in his eyes.9
"I Shayne David Caldow, knowing your love for me and returning it, realizing your strengths and learning from them, recognizing your weaknesses and helping you to overcome them. 10
Beside me and apart from me, in laughter and in tears, in conflict and tranquility, asking that you be no other than yourself, loving what I know of you, trusting what I do not know yet. 11
Your love has given me wings, and our journey begins today. I pledge before this assembled company to be your husband from this day forward, I want you for today, tomorrow, and forever." His voice was soft, but strong. He know knew what he wanted and would give anything for her. She took a breathe and started,12
"I Elizabeth Rachael Townsend, knowing your love for me and returning it....." she had said every word so smoothly. She had wished for this very moment for so long. They both stared at each other as the minister spoke the last words,13
"Now you will feel no rain, for each of you will be sanctuary to the other. Now you will feel no cold, for each of you will be warmth to the other. Now there is no isolation for you. Now there is no more loneliness. Now you are two, but there is only one life in front of you." They both grinned, knowing from this day on there lives would always be together. His head went forward as did hers and there lips touched, sharing there first sweet kiss of there life together.
Author notes
working title..wat u think?
[= tell me the truth... is this okai?
Comments
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WOW this was a spectacular story i have soooooooo much to say but it cant come out my mouth sorry but awesome job keep making people pround
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that was spectacular uhh sooooooooo much to say but cant come out my mouth soo mad grrr. i love the story make more people proud

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Very Nice
It portrayed their emotions very well. I most enjoyed the preacher's word and Shayne's little part.beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 3.
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nice work
It was a very realistic scene and one that most can identify. Even after years of divorce I can still remember my reaction to her walk down the aisle. (In retrospect; I wish she would have kept walking)
You touched both emotions very well and the flow was good. However, I always stumble over typos and there were some misspellings that detracted [for me at least] from a great write. It's those things that look ok to Spell Check but really are misused words.
"That's the truth and it's more than okai"

beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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it is very okai. haha! this was really sweet and very well described! i loved it! aww man im such a sucker for romance...its hard not to love it.
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This was sweet, very well done with pretty vowels.
Keep it up.
~Ebb

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